Eating PLastic NEW SONG

[freestyle1k86]

Eating plastic
that's fantastic
yeah

hand me some chap stick
before I collapse with
fear

reading the label
as if i was able
yeah

bang my
head on the table
but it turns out it's over there

and i felt something inside


watching a movie
wondering who that is

talking about neighbors
of whom we know their kids

my mother tells me
one of the kids just died

turns out it's
my imagination
i'll blame it on the ride

and I felt something inside

i've never thrown up in a plane
but i hate it all the same


that's pretty much all i have now

[Sugar Chestnut]

woah its nuts but i so dont get it, and yet i love it because you made a song about plastic and chapstick

[Nightvision]

man, that was a waste of my life. You should put a disclaimer up if you're going to waste people's time with utter shite like that.

[SubtleDagger]

Lurk more

[freestyle1k86]

It actually describes some instances that have happened in my life. It's not a waste of time. It's a work in progress. It's a serious effort. So shut the **** up.

[Nightvision]

Eating plastic
that's fantastic
yeah
hand me some chap stick
before I collapse with
fear

Oh really? I'm down with metaphors and imagery, but that's just crap.

[SubtleDagger]

It actually describes some instances that have happened in my life. It's not a waste of time. It's a work in progress. It's a serious effort. So shut the **** up.
I think you're lying.

By the way, Mr. Joke Song, I would watch who you tell to shut up or you will be heeding your own advice soon.

[freestyle1k86]

I think you're lying.

By the way, Mr. Joke Song, I would watch who you tell to shut up or you will be heeding your own advice soon.
Well there's no way in proving either argument so couldn't you just please believe me?


And I'm Mr. Joke Song?

[freestyle1k86]

Oh really? I'm down with metaphors and imagery, but that's just crap.
Actually there are absolutely no metaphors nor imagery in that verse.

[SubtleDagger]

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=346445

[freestyle1k86]

Here's the story for the first verse, believe me or don't. I honestly don't care because it really happened.


There are clear plastic bags with some sort of chemical in them that are placed in a container to preserve certain foods. THey might be a chemical that absorbs water. Anyway, on the packet it says that it's toxic and should not be consumed.

So my brother, who was only 4 at the time, was sitting at the table, when suddently we (my family and I) see him chewing on this piece of plastic. And we freaked out thinking he just ate the poison.

There was some logical meaning for the chapstick I forgot about. Anyway, I was scared.

It turned out he wasn't eating the plastic bag with chemicals, just some plastic from another bag, for candy or something. And then I just wrote about it.

[freestyle1k86]

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=346445
I ddn't want to start a conversation on chicken. The song is entitled that becasue I'm referring to that spectator as the chicken, not doing anything to help because he is too scared. You're a moderator of songwriting, you should at least read the song rather than "judge a book by its cover".

[Nightvision]

Actually there are absolutely no metaphors nor imagery in that verse.

Dude, you're getting raped here. Save yourself some embarrassment, just admit that they were crud songs and don't do it again.

[SubtleDagger]

And it's probably the dumbest thing to write a song about ever.

[freestyle1k86]

Oh thanks guys. Really helping me out with this song that I obviously like. Besides the fact that you guys think it's crap, what do you think of the song.

And you're telling me that my topic is horrible, next to other songs being praise that are about how sad you are after your girlfriend dumped you...

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

He also posted the "Rock Songs are Easy to Write, Because Writing Blues and Jazz Using Repetative Progressions and Scales Isn't" thread.

[freestyle1k86]

Oh yey. This has become a thread to personally attack freestyle1k86. I was serious, you didn't take me seriously. First impressions really are important huh.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Hey it could be worse, I could be attacking your mom... with my penis.

[SubtleDagger]

Oh thanks guys. Really helping me out with this song that I obviously like. Besides the fact that you guys think it's crap, what do you think of the song.

And you're telling me that my topic is horrible, next to other songs being praise that are about how sad you are after your girlfriend dumped you...
Songs about girls are about 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000 00000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000 0000000000000000000000000000000 times better than your songs.

[Nightvision]

And you're telling me that my topic is horrible, next to other songs being praise that are about how sad you are after your girlfriend dumped you...

Find one post of mine where I have praised one of those songs, and I will eat my words.

Find one of SD doing that, and I'll give head to the entire population of S&L.





*really hopes Burt isn't feeling nasty right now*

[SubtleDagger]

Find one post of mine where I have praised one of those songs, and I will eat my words.

Find one of SD doing that, and I'll give head to the entire population of S&L.





*really hopes Burt isn't feeling nasty right now*
Hahaha. I never praise those songs. And by that I mean that I've panned every song APS has written.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

I do write shitty songs, it's a complex.

[Nightvision]

oh, snap!

[freestyle1k86]

It doesn't matter. Then do this one thing and I will shut up.
Give me one actual reason why the song is horrible. Not because it sucks. Not because I chose something stupid to write about. Not becuase talking about the girl you love is a better topic. Tell me why it's bad.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

So, you want us to give you more reasons why the song is horrible, because the blunt ones aren't good enough?

[SubtleDagger]

It doesn't matter. Then do this one thing and I will shut up.
Give me one actual reason why the song is horrible. Not because it sucks. Not because I chose something stupid to write about. Not becuase talking about the girl you love is a better topic. Tell me why it's bad.
I have to give you a reason the song is horrible without telling you why it's horrible?

Make some sense kid.

[Nightvision]

Eating plastic
that's fantastic
yeah

hand me some chap stick
before I collapse with
fear


THAT is why. Those are arguably two of the worst 'verses' I have ever read on here, and that's against some pretty strong competition. It was dull, your rhyming was worse than atrocious, it made no sense, and was annoyingly pretentious and self-important.

That one good enough?

[freestyle1k86]

So, you want us to give you more reasons why the song is horrible, because the blunt ones aren't good enough?
Yes. That's exactly it. We've already established the fact the song sucks. Now help me make it better. That's why I would post it on these forums in the first place.

[freestyle1k86]

I have to give you a reason the song is horrible without telling you why it's horrible?

Make some sense kid.

Reason - a statement offered in explanation or justification
Why - for what cause, reason, or purpose

From the Webster's dictionary. I'm making sense, kid.

[freestyle1k86]

THAT is why. Those are arguably two of the worst 'verses' I have ever read on here, and that's against some pretty strong competition. It was dull, your rhyming was worse than atrocious, it made no sense, and was annoyingly pretentious and self-important.

That one good enough?
No. Don't just copy my song again and give that as a reason.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

There's just no pleasing you, is there?

[Nightvision]

It was dull, your rhyming was worse than atrocious, it made no sense, and was annoyingly pretentious and self-important.


Ok, how about that bit, that looks like a fairly good reason...

[freestyle1k86]

It was dull, your rhyming was worse than atrocious, it made no sense, and was annoyingly pretentious and self-important.


Ok, how about that bit, that looks like a fairly good reason...
THe rhyming I liked but I can see how people can have trouble with it. I used to listen to a lot of rap, so my rhyming is weird.

It probably doesn't make sense. But if so, how is it in anyway pretentious and self-important?

[freestyle1k86]

There's just no pleasing you, is there?
Not really. It seems to me that all of this is just arguing for the sake of arguing, and not really because it's really the opinion.

[Rahfulkoptar]

man, that was a waste of my life. You should put a disclaimer up if you're going to waste people's time with utter shite like that.

WTF???? It's FUNNY! If he isn't 'serious' about this song then I shall have to steal it GGROFLPWNTNUB

[freestyle1k86]

I'd like to add that you guys should be a bit more open minded. There are many bands out there that have ridiculous titles and lyrics to their songs but they are accomplished great bands. Pavement, Apples in Stereo. Get some lyrics by Robyn HItchcock. Of Montreal has an album with 4-track demos they recorded. Look at the track names for that album. It's hysterical, the music is great. So don't go insulting lyrics that don't fit into the category of metal, or emo, or something incredibly serious and at the same time a bit ridiculous. This is a serious effort and I feel offended that you find it stupid because it's not intended to be stupid, at all.

[SubtleDagger]

That's enough, dude. When you get serious about writing you can post a song. This thread has rightfully degenerated.