Metalcore/Screamo

[conniption]

In the Vineyard (http://www.myspace.com/inthevineyard) or our purevolume (http://www.purevolume.com/inthevineyard)

check us out, thanks

[Local_Skater]

Well...I don't know what to say really. So I'll break it down.

The vocals: It was probably the means of recording that were used, but the screaming to me sounded like a bunch of incoherent shrieks and growls. I couldn't really hear any trace of an actual word in there. Im not sure what your main influences are, but try to practice your screaming to bands that are more clear with their vocals. Some of these being Atreyu, Trivium, and Beloved. Also, try to find a better way to record and then repost after you do.

The Guitar: You can't really seem to play your lines fast enough to keep up with the bass rhythm. From the sounds of it you probably got started on guitar a year or two ago. When trying to make good music it is important to not try to play beyond your ability level. When people try to do that, it can cause people to think that you arn't good. By using a simpler line that has a good flow and sounds like you actually put some thought into it, you will actually sound better on a record than trying to play a line that doesn't flow and sounds like you are struggling to keep up. In a few more years, you will be able to play more technical lines with much more ease than now, but having the enthusiasm to make those lines by yourself is a good sign. By pushing yourself to do this, you will improve much faster than by just playing easy songs.

The bass: Not really anything bad to say about you did a pretty good job keeping the rhythm through the songs, although the lines were pretty basic and generic. To make your parts more interesting try to add in some fills between note changes and become more original. This could be done by adding mixed strumming patterns rather than the basic up/ downpicking eith notes.

The drums: Even though a drummer was listed on the purevolume site, I didn't hear any drumming in the recordings, so I can't comment on that.

Overall I think you guys have potential, but it will take quite a bit of work, as is true with any band.

[conniption]

thanks for the constructive critisism. And the reason some of the guitar riffs arent played well is because on one song we made it up in 5 minutes, but yea it could use some work. In a couple of months everything should be running smoother because we just picked up a drummer and a second guitarist. Thanks again for actually reviewing/critiqueing our stuff.