puddle of filth

[darkstar_s.s.]

tell me what you think about it i wrote it today it is a death metal song
PUDDLE OF FILTH :amaze:

Now im face down in a puddle of filth
and im late now for the film
because im face down in a puddle of filth
now I break down in this place

so here I am on my way
getting ready to rock on a sunset lane
here I am late for the show
everyone is getting ready to go

and im still face down in a puddle
I will be late now for the film
because im face down in a puddle of filth
I will break down in this place

I am still on my way
to rock on a sunset lane
I am still late for the show
everyone is wanting to go

face

down x2

im face down in this puddle of filth I can’t breathe
I can’t eat nor sleep
I can’t get out, trapped down inside
now I’m falling
this sight is appalling

this is the end
I am starting shake
the earth is beginning to quake
here it goes face down in a puddle of filth
I am now late for the film
late for the show
I do not want to go

face

down x2

face down in this puddle of filth
trying to wait now for life to come
the end has not begun
and I’m still face down in this puddle
waiting now for this new time to come

tell me what you think it is a death metal song

[FizHarris]

tell me what you think about it i wrote it today it is a death metal song
PUDDLE OF FILTH :amaze:

Now im face down in a puddle of filth
and im late now for the film
because im face down in a puddle of filth
now I break down in this puddle of filth

so here I am on my way
getting ready to rock on a sunset lane
here I am late for the show
everyone is getting ready to go

and im still face down in a puddle of filth
I will be late now for the film
because im face down in a puddle of filth
I will break down in this puddle of filth

I am still on my way
to rock on a sunset lane
I am still late for the show
everyone is wanting to go

face

down x2

im face down in this puddle of filth I can’t breathe
I can’t eat nor sleep
I can’t get out, trapped down inside
now I’m falling
this sight is appalling

this is the end
I am starting shake
the earth is beginning to quake
here it goes face down in a puddle of filth
I am now late for the film
late for the show
I do not want to go

face

down x2

face down in this puddle of filth
trying to wait now for life to come
the end has not begun
and I’m still face down in this puddle of filth
waiting now for this new time to come

tell me what you think it is a death metal song

hmm good try but I don't really quite like it. You used too much of 'puddle of filth'.

[ABulldog]

What exactly is a puddle of filth?

[darkstar_s.s.]

a puddle of filth is like dirty water or something i don't know it was something to write about

[panthersfan16]

Sounds like a song about addiction to me...I didn't really like it...the whole thing seemed pointless, like "I missed Star Wars because I couldnt stop myself from doing Speed"

You say This Puddle Of Filth way too much, and it gets almost annoying. One thing I did like, was that the overall song had a cool flow, and I had a picture of an orange light breaking through black clouds...am I crazy? I don't know, really. This is a cool idea, but you could have done better

4/10

Plz crit Untitled if you have time

[Fonder4Fan4Ever]

Yeah i gotta agree wtf. It sounds like your talking about some movie or something and ur sad cuz u got wasted and passed out in a puddle of your own vomit or something. U say or mention puddles or filth 7 times in this song. which is like 6 to many. it gets old hella fast. i must say. also wtf this like doesnt seem like it could possibly be a deathmetal song. its too corny lol.

[WeerezIsTehWinz]

Forced rhyming, elementary language, overall uninteresting and painfully basic. Sorry, but this is just not good. Keep writing a few years, maybe you'll get a hang of it. But as for now... Nope.

[NoHero9]

I dont like it, but then again I despise death metal. you know what, I actually hated it, puddle of filth is right.....more like pile of shi't

[darkstar_s.s.]

**** you guys i ****ing hate you all you stupid mother ****ers go to ****ing hell

[darkstar_s.s.]

stupid **** quit bleeping me out

[Nightvision]

haha, owned by the swear filter...

If you weren't such a little bitch, someone would probably tell you. Ah well. Enjoy your ban. :)

[XemoXmoshXpitX]

We try to help you improve your songwriting in this forum. Not flame you.




As for the song, keep trying. Don't try so hard to rhyme. Use different phrases for "puddle of filth". Try not to repeat the same things over and over.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

I am the swear filter's master, observe:

****.
****.
Damn.

Yeah, I'll have to agree with everyone else that your song blows.

[NoHero9]

well I dont know about all that swear filter stuff, but I think it's hilarious how he just completely flew off the handle.

Sommeone has some issues to work out.

[Fonder4Fan4Ever]

Lol. UR an idiot. You post this song asking us to critique it. We tell you it sucks. So then you tell us to **** off. wtf u want us to do? lie to you and tell you its good so u can be laughed at by others cuz u thought this was what ppl wanted to hear? get a life.

[kevbud187]

well I dont know about all that swear filter stuff, but I think it's hilarious how he just completely flew off the handle.

Sommeone has some issues to work out.

And people are suprised he writes bad death metal :lol:

[malaki157]

Heres some constructive criticism dude I know death metal I listen to it, your lyrics doesn't seems to obtain the general guidelines to how one (death metalist) would write a song, I sing in a hardcore metal band, I'm no expert dude myself but I can't see how your vocals could match up with the way your wrote the lyrics beeing it for death metsl.. Reminds me of "Puddle of Mud"

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Heres some constructive criticism dude I know death metal I listen to it, your lyrics doesn't seems to obtain the general guidelines to how one (death metalist) would write a song, I sing in a hardcore metal band, I'm no expert dude myself but I can't see how your vocals could match up with the way your wrote the lyrics beeing it for death metsl.. Reminds me of "Puddle of Mud"

You spelled your user-title wrong... and a lot of other words.

[DeadReligion]

This sucks. I am no death metal master but, b.i.t.c.h PLEASE. lol...This is pretty bad, sorry try again. And I think everyone on this forum who knows me can agree when I say it's bad...that's saying something, since most of em hate the stuff I write too...Yeah, dude, no need to go off the handle, though, I must say, it brought me much amusement, but honestly, calm down, not everyone will like ur stuff. I know people who like my stuff, not on this forum, try asking some of ur friends...just make sure they aren't lying to make u feel better