"I'm a freak" (not what it sounds like, it's an acoustic song)

[boyhendoghdy]

ok, at first i was gonna make this an acoustic song, but now changed my mind, barre chords (G B C Cm)

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“I’m a Freak”

Verse 1:
(all very subdued, guitar on its clean channel only)
Walk past me
With their remarks
Make gestures
Hide in the dark
Make it worse
They just stare
What’s wrong with me
Why do I care

Chorus:
(kick in with a little bit of distortion and the rest of the band)
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a loser
No one wants me here anyway
(back to just one guitar with tis clean channel) Cause I’m a freak
I’m a freak

Verse 2:
(guitar only, clean channel)
Through the day
Its all the same
Why do they do this
Am I to blame
Everyone’s different
‘specially me
Stuck on a plateau
Just let me be

Chorus:
(kick in with a little bit of distortion and the rest of the band)
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a loser
No one wants me here anyway
(back to just one guitar with tis clean channel) Cause I’m a freak
I’m a freak

Verse 3:
(guitar only, clean)
Look at the clock
Ticking away
It’s all so simple
All today
Tell me I’m ok
Say I’m alright
Tell me I’m needed here
It’s part of life


Outro:
(just like the chorus)
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a loser
No one wants me here anyway
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a freak
(back to what it is like for the verse)
I’m a freak
I’m a freak
(just like chorus)
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a loser
No one wants me here anyway
Cause I’m a freak
I’m a freak

[silent_screamer]

it's not bad. flows nice. the chorus reminded me of that song "Creep" can't remember who it's by right now. but maybe it was just the way i read it. i think this has good potential. The subject is something a lot of people use and it's a bit clique. The way it's sung and the music to it could make it stand out from any other songs like it. THe first verse you're talking about other people right? and what they do? 'hide in the dark' is that suppose to be them? i don't think it goes well with the rest of the verse. Might want to rephrase that.

ang-i

[drifting away]

I really liked it. I really dont see anything that I'd chage. The whole song is catchy. And the simple chorus is perfect for this song.
8.5/10


Drift...

[boyhendoghdy]

it's not bad. flows nice. the chorus reminded me of that song "Creep" can't remember who it's by right now. but maybe it was just the way i read it. i think this has good potential. The subject is something a lot of people use and it's a bit clique. The way it's sung and the music to it could make it stand out from any other songs like it. THe first verse you're talking about other people right? and what they do? 'hide in the dark' is that suppose to be them? i don't think it goes well with the rest of the verse. Might want to rephrase that.

ang-i

yeah i had trouble finding a good line in the place of "hide in the dark", to make more sense until i find a better line i could change it to "i hide in the dark", the only reason i left out "I" in the first place was because it kinda knocked of the flow, but ok, point taken

[ABulldog]

This is exactly what I thought it was.

[boyhendoghdy]

um, ok

[darkstar_s.s.]

sounded good go to puddle of filth and rate it for me please someone it sounds like a good song to me

[jmundy]

it's not bad. flows nice. the chorus reminded me of that song "Creep" can't remember who it's by right now. but maybe it was just the way i read it. i think this has good potential. The subject is something a lot of people use and it's a bit clique. The way it's sung and the music to it could make it stand out from any other songs like it. THe first verse you're talking about other people right? and what they do? 'hide in the dark' is that suppose to be them? i don't think it goes well with the rest of the verse. Might want to rephrase that.

ang-i Radiohead did the Creep your thinkin of

[panthersfan16]

This song was very simple, definitely cliche. I doubt anyone has listened to Third Eye Blind's "Out of the Vein" album, but it reminds of a song called the Misfits on there.

I am not a huge fan of forced rhyming, and I sense a bit of it here... but overall I think your song has some potential, if you can get a cool guitar solo in there (I'm thinkin a bluesy distorted guitar solo), you may have a decent song right here

7/10

[YouGottaBeCrazy]

Not only do the lyrics remind me of "Creep", but I'm pretty sure that chord progression you are using is the same as the one in Creep. What do you have to say for yourself?!? lol

[boyhendoghdy]

yeah, i checked out that song after that guy mentioned it, and the progression is kinda alike, and i am probably wrong but i think they are using a 7 barre chord in there somewhere, and the chords are held for 2 measures not 1, and obviously it is arpeggioed, so yeah i guess they are kinda alike music wise