d0ped0g
05-09-2005, 04:53 AM
Yeah, this is crit for crit... so if you want one, leave a url
But funnily enough, i dont really want a crit, as such (considering this definately isnt my best song, and i know that)
Just, some perspective on a situation and the appropriateness of the song.
You see, this is a song i'm supposed to have written about this girl (she requested i write one for her, so i did). Unfortunately, I think it is abit too forward about my feelings for her and about our relationship; so forward, that it might be weird to play it to her, with her knowing what its about. Atm, we're just friends, but both like each other alot. The problem is, although she thinks i am literally the perfect guy for her, she doesnt want to be in a relationship as it is too emotionally consuming. That's what the song is mainly about.
For You
I can see it in your eyes
An emptiness, consuming
And lord knows why you cry
When it’s exhaustingly easy to bear
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll never know will eat you alive
And what’s the use in compromise
When it comes from the core of all of your lies.
To tell you the truth, I can relate
But what we have between us, I cannot sedate.
Can’t you take a breather from this sanity?
As I see your imperfections all so perfectly.
And you take the words right from my mouth
But I wish you could speak for me now
So I talk in tongues when you're around
Cause I’m afraid that what comes from the heart
Will be the end of me...
Will be the end of me...
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll never know will eat you alive
And what’s the use in compromise
When it comes from the core of all of your lies.
And when I look up through the sky
I overflow in the rain the light seems to cry
And i'll cradle the tears that fall from your face
If its the closest i'll come to feeling your embrace.
And when we put an end to all this thinking
We let this masquerade flutter astray
Rarely looking back at that logic
Scattered among the ashes of a lovesick Pompeii.
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll ever know will eat you alive
Please grant me the strength to wish that you'd die
Because nothing can contest the anguish I feel
For you...
But funnily enough, i dont really want a crit, as such (considering this definately isnt my best song, and i know that)
Just, some perspective on a situation and the appropriateness of the song.
You see, this is a song i'm supposed to have written about this girl (she requested i write one for her, so i did). Unfortunately, I think it is abit too forward about my feelings for her and about our relationship; so forward, that it might be weird to play it to her, with her knowing what its about. Atm, we're just friends, but both like each other alot. The problem is, although she thinks i am literally the perfect guy for her, she doesnt want to be in a relationship as it is too emotionally consuming. That's what the song is mainly about.
For You
I can see it in your eyes
An emptiness, consuming
And lord knows why you cry
When it’s exhaustingly easy to bear
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll never know will eat you alive
And what’s the use in compromise
When it comes from the core of all of your lies.
To tell you the truth, I can relate
But what we have between us, I cannot sedate.
Can’t you take a breather from this sanity?
As I see your imperfections all so perfectly.
And you take the words right from my mouth
But I wish you could speak for me now
So I talk in tongues when you're around
Cause I’m afraid that what comes from the heart
Will be the end of me...
Will be the end of me...
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll never know will eat you alive
And what’s the use in compromise
When it comes from the core of all of your lies.
And when I look up through the sky
I overflow in the rain the light seems to cry
And i'll cradle the tears that fall from your face
If its the closest i'll come to feeling your embrace.
And when we put an end to all this thinking
We let this masquerade flutter astray
Rarely looking back at that logic
Scattered among the ashes of a lovesick Pompeii.
But there’s something you can never deny
What you'll ever know will eat you alive
Please grant me the strength to wish that you'd die
Because nothing can contest the anguish I feel
For you...