The tears of my soul

[infoworx]

here is my problem.. i can easily write lyrics but i cant see to be imaginative to write music to fit the lyrics.. if anyone can help me i will very greatfull.. ANw.. here is a song for a girl that i love..

All those lies you told me
and all the pain i keep inside
sent me to hell and killed my soul
altough the many times i've tried..
But im gonna keep on pretending
like i've been all those years
and baby if u look closely ..
u might just see my tears

R| The Tears of my soul
the pain i keep inside
the broken wishes i've made
until i lost the fight

Now all its left behind
is nothing just like me
a drained highway of hopes
a vision of how life could be
This vision had u by myside
this vision had u next to me..
walking together in paradise..
but this Vision died..
just like m..

R| The Tears of my soul
the pain i keep inside
the broken wishes i've made
until i lost the fight

[bowl of oranges]

I haven't got many tips for putting music to the lyrics, i'm not too great at that myself. But just commenting on your lyrics.

It's not too bad, not too keen on this style of song that is a little depressing. The repeat of such phrases as 'the pain i keep inside' don't help with this too much.

This vision had u by myside
this vision had u next to me..

These two lines are not different enough to warrant having both. Try changing it up a bit.

Overall not too bad, but a little boring in parts. Liked the idea of visions of walking in paradise. Maybe develop on a hopeful idea rather than becoming too depressing talking about all the pain. That's just my opinion anyway.

6/10

Would really appreciate a crit on my work.

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=338240

thanks.