Stolen Mind

[Steel Sun]

Lost!, in my head and the darkness all around me.
Suffocate, in nightmares, i fall into a reality.
Frustration, when i wake cuz i no il have to face the nights,
Again, they'll come around will this happen until i die?

Cuz im falling down into a hole. nightmares come to life.
Starting to think iv gone to hell, Maybe iv already died.

Lost!, in a maze of questions without answers.
And i try, to break free but im pinned by evil powers.
And i drown, in the dreams, i wake to find another door.
Who are you? i know your face, but i know iv never seen you before.

i know iv never seen you before.
i know iv never seen you before.

Cuz i recognise the faces i see, but i know we've never met.
Iv never seen this place before, i recognise the set.

Inside of me.
Inside of me.
There are some things that you wont wanna see.

The beast in my head.
The souls from the dead.
Plaguing my mind pushining me to death.

Inside of me.
Inside of me.
There are some things that you wont wanna see.

The beast in my head.
The souls from the dead.
Plaguing my mind pushining me to death.

Lost!, sense of time, sometimes i wake in a room.
and i see, figures stand, all around i see them move.
They dissapear, once again. the visulations reappear.
Im not so sure, if they been. or is this the first time they have
appeared?

Cuz i recognise what i see. but iv never seen them before.
I slip between different dreams, i see reality no more.

Lost! who are you? i find myself asking this.
once more. you stare at me. I try but i cant clear the mist.
From my brain. You gaze at me, as if im supposed to know who you
are. But i dont. I dont know anything anymore.

Dont know anything anymore.
Dont know anything anymore.

Cuz i recognise the faces i see, but i know we've never met.
Iv never seen this place before, i recognise the set.

Inside of me.
Inside of me.
There are some things that you wont wanna see.

The beast in my head.
The souls from the dead.
Plaguing my mind pushining me to death.

Inside of me.
Inside of me.
There are some things that you wont wanna see.

The beast in my head.
The souls from the dead.
Plaguing my mind pushining me to death.

My stolen Mind
My stolen Mind
My stolen Mind
My stolen Mind

[Steel Sun]

please crit for lew bitte

[mosher902]

some nice rythm stolen sun i like the chorus, the only main crit i have is the Lost! bit makes it sound to much like a wannabe heavy rock song

[Farm girl]

I agree with Mosher 902

[Steel Sun]

cheers guys....and girls....present company excepted. i think its a pretty origional song in terms of flow. It was one of those spur of the moment things where u get a tune in ur head that u kinda repeat to urself without realising u could use it. Not sure about the lyrics as its not particularly new. Cheers

[ABulldog]

The flow I wouldn't say is original, but it is definatley not the same old boring verse/chorus/verse. That being said, the lyrics are only decent. They offer us nothing new and seem like the same old boring stuff that we have seen posted on here a billion times.

[Steel Sun]

how can u say the flow is the same when u haven't heard it? yea sure....jus reading it they sound familiar....yuh no. omg. if ur gonna come on here crit the ****ing thing....dont jus say....er...yer....borin...er...flow isnt correct. come on. ...jesus. I pissed the chorus up as i pasted the older version which didn't help. my fault.

[ABulldog]

Don't get pissed off at me. You asked for crits and I gave you my thoughts. I didn't say the flow was the same either. And I have heard this. I read it. That is the flow I get. Sure when you put it to music it might be something completely different, but they way it looks on paper is all I have to go on, so don't have a ****ing cow. I was actually impressed with the flow, just making a simple comment on how it isn't 100% original. **** man... did you think you were some sort of genius and that everyone was going to be blown away by this piece? I didn't say that it was boring. I said it was decent... as in decent. Look up the word if you have to. Don't get mad because the actual topic isn't original. I think a better word for flow would be structure.

[Steel Sun]

swish

[ABulldog]

lol.

[Steel Sun]

yer...

[mosher902]

Don't get pissed off at me. You asked for crits and I gave you my thoughts. I didn't say the flow was the same either. And I have heard this. I read it. That is the flow I get. Sure when you put it to music it might be something completely different, but they way it looks on paper is all I have to go on, so don't have a ****ing cow. I was actually impressed with the flow, just making a simple comment on how it isn't 100% original. **** man... did you think you were some sort of genius and that everyone was going to be blown away by this piece? I didn't say that it was boring. I said it was decent... as in decent. Look up the word if you have to. Don't get mad because the actual topic isn't original. I think a better word for flow would be structure.

it's like a married couple "don't talk to me like that, the turn was there oh look now we've missed the neil diamond concert!"

[Nightvision]

:lol::lol::lol:

[jar_hed678900]

all i have to say is dont go to bed angry

[jar_hed678900]

and neil diamond rules! (sniffle sniffle) lol pssshya right

[nakiwiroda]

i really like the song and it seems really original. The flow i think is also pretty good but as i dont know how fast you play and sing it it seems a little long.. So as said before you could maybe throw out the Lost part of it

[Steel Sun]

thanx

[JIMIKURTJIMMY]

Bravo, I like it. Although its tough to judge w/ out hearing the music, i would say its got a great flow 8.5/10

[Steel Sun]

thanx alot.