'Waiting For Time'... what do you think?

[Contristo]

Hi. Our band, The Trade, just recently put our newest song up... 'Waiting For Time.' Any feedback, critiques, or reviews of any sort are greatly appreciated! :)

http://www.myspace.com/thetrade

[aguywithaguitar]

i dont like it, it sounds too disjointed

[Contristo]

i dont like it, it sounds too disjointed

oh, any suggestions to make it more organized?

very nice songs on your soundclick, by the way.

[GuitarDude570b]

yea, i kind of agree, im not sure what it is, the rhythm of the song sometimes doesn't feel right, i think maybe the mix needs to be a bit more consistant, like it sounds like the vocals are right there up front and stick out too much, instead you should put more into your vocals (project more) so you dont have to boast it right up front and itll sound better, and then a lot of the other stuff is too distant, i mean maybe thats the sound you were going for which actually i wouldnt doubt it for this style, i dunno, its kinda tricky to pinpoint what i dont like about it, but youre on a nice track, keep it up man, pretty cool ideas

[Silverhammer]

i like the lyrics for no man's land, and the originality of the song is in there. some things that you might want to consider: Make the background beat louder and your voice less prominent b/c having the voice dwarf the other instruments just doesn't sound right for this song. also in the chorus the guitar that is strumming along needs to keep up with the background beat that you have. this is the disjointed sound that people are talking about. you have two different tempos going so it sounds musically confused. To add, you should make the sliding on the guitar just flow into the words instead of having the guitar slide-pause-words this adds to the disjointed sound of the piece. hope this helps. you are a good writer btw.