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firemoth12
04-24-2005, 08:20 PM
I wrote this song in a pretty short period of time. I guess it's a little political but it's probably too general...who knows. Anyway the lyrics do fit the music for it even though sometimes it may seem weird. It's for a Thrashy/Death metal style tune.

How To Start A War

first, we need some hate
but it's already been brought by them
hate doesn't stop for forgiveness
or for our begs and pleas
It just spreads

second, motivation
but isn't a parasite enough for that?
but isn't an invasion enough for that?
what's ironic is: we are the parasite

CHORUS:
Do you know how to start a war?
Go into a country and just take over.
Do you know how to start a war?
Fight 'till death with a thousand soldiers.

third, you need love
because if there's no love, theres no hate
and a country is something to love
it's not worth it just to run away

fourth, you need weapons
brutal destruction is what's accomplished
kill everyone with sadistic hatred
nothing but endless termination





Thats what I have. Of course it's a work in progress. Any suggestions?

firemoth12
04-25-2005, 12:22 PM
already on page 2....

Nightvision
04-25-2005, 12:24 PM
I'm sorry, I won't crit (don't know you, have no reason to crit, etc...) but I'll tell you that this is reasonably good, but not brilliant. Interesting though.

firemoth12
04-25-2005, 06:08 PM
up-

RyMac59
04-25-2005, 06:42 PM
Might work for a punk song or something simple. It'd be a little scary if it's not taken as like a joke, cause if you're really keen on killing people and all, more descriptive words would work better.


http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=333514
Crit back please

firemoth12
04-25-2005, 07:12 PM
Might work for a punk song or something simple. It'd be a little scary if it's not taken as like a joke, cause if you're really keen on killing people and all, more descriptive words would work better.


http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=333514
Crit back please

Are you sure you read it right? It has nothing to do with me killing people. It's about war (more specifically the Iraq war, but I didn't mention that).

It's for a death metal/thrash style tune. I kind of had Lamb of God in mind when I was writing it.