Hit With Inspiration

[kiros_music]

Look at this song and please critique I'm still doing some tweaking so its not finished and i still need to add to it

Waiting here for something better
Looking for it but never found
Hidden beneath the hate for myself
Being smacked in the face
Now a daily routine
When it ends who knows now
Stand up and fall down again
My only question now is when??
When am I done When can I leave
And now I wait

Waiting Here Looking Here
Nothing Here Something here
Maybe here Maybe not
What’s the point
There is none

Tell me I’m right,
and I’ll tell you your wrong
Need to find the answer
I find the paper I find the pen
Jot it down over again
I think it’s over I think it’s done
Or I’m over Or maybe I’ve won
I’m still looking
For the pain killer of life

[Liquid Fantasy]

ok... there are some parts i really didn't see what line had to do with another, but the song is allright.
6.5/10

[Liquid Fantasy]

ok... there are some parts i really didn't see what line had to do with another, but the song is allright.
6.5/10

[Liquid Fantasy]

ok... there are some parts i really didn't see what a line had to do with another, but the song is allright.
6.5/10

[Liquid Fantasy]

im sorry i posted three times the same thing i'ts just that my computer wasn't loading the page and i kept going

[viva_la_danny]

uhh only post once please

edit:oh sorry