stay away/ crit please

[rockerofnevada]

you were always in my way
forcing me to do stupid things
always saying no and no
for the things i gotta do

you gotta learn how to stay away
so i can have my life
and do the things i need to do
to succed in my life

stay away from me till i say when
better do it now before i run away
to the place you'd least expect
to the place i was tortured

[Bub]

If I can be brutally honest, it sounds like you wrote this whilst feeling these exact words and so, whilst its from the heart, its not really poetry. My advice would be to use this as your base line, and work other ideas from it. Use metaphors, use double meaning, try and stay away from "you did this and you did that"
Its also very short, so whether its incomplete or not, I don't know, but hey some great songs have like, no lyrics (Deciever, Judas Priest)
Sorry if I sound harsh, but this is all constructive critiscism