The Jaded; Who Live Lost, Faded

[Ethan'sBrand]

I'm always changin'
And you've never seemed so strange in
In all of your ways
Blame your will that leaves you still the same.

Some way...come down
I wonder where you're going if you don't ever touch ground
And every day...I keep getting further away
And further away...and farther's not the way.

Been always changin'
And I've never seemed so strange
In all of my days
I've never felt so jaded
Poor at best, they say
I've never felt so berated...
But, I blame my will that leaves me still the same.

Nothin' changes...and I've never felt so strange as
I blame my own will that leads me still the same
Just further to blame...

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I know this is excessively cliche...but I just thought I'd put it down...kind of sounds like an anthem :) tell me what you think...

Revision #2

[thirdeyeblindislit]

Wow, actually that was very good. I like the way it flowed, and it didnt really sound to forced in the rhyming department either. The line that I didnt like in this song however was "and further away, but farther is not the way." I dont know what it was about that line, but it really doesnt fit in here. You may want to think about changing that. Also it was a bit on the short side, which I have noticed that alot of the song's have been getting like recentally. Other than that it was good. Nice job and keep it up. 8.8/10. :thumb:

ALSO PLEASE DONT FORGET TO VOTE, IN THE S&L HALL OF FAME. Thanks. :thumb:

[Liquid Fantasy]

third eye i have to disagree there are parts where I think it was a forced rhyming..
but anyways... its just my opinion
overall 7.5/10 it just needs a few adjustments and thats it.

[Ethan'sBrand]

I don't like Crossfade but when I sing it sounds like their song So Far Away...but thanks for the advice...