Royal Return

[mindofpoison]

This one is kinda rapcore/metal. still a work-in-progress with the music yet to be put to it and possibly a few lyrical changes to be made. This is it so far.

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Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Reclaim my throne take back my crown....

I played my cards like any other man
But worked twice as hard to get where i am
Years gone by you never bothered to try
Now you want sympathy with them crocodile tears you cry

Look back on the past when i worked off my a*s
Back then you guys laughed and now you want my autograph?
You tried to break my dream you really tried your best
But now i've made it you try to rob my success?

No I ain't having that
No I ain't having that
It's time i took back what is mine

Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Watch out muthaf**kers, the King's back in town
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Now that i'm back who'll f**k with my Queen now?
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Made a return to bring my Kingdom around
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Hit you right back when you all thought i was down

Worked years for these riches
Only to be robbed by these bitches
My glory stole by these vultures
They turn on you, sh*t on you like crows on sculptures

So i go toe-to-toe with these traitors
Recapture my gold from these raiders
I'm guna show all you faders
And f**king kill all you haters

Look back on the past when i worked off my a*s
Back then you guys laughed and now you want my autograph?
You tried to break my dream you really tried your best
But now i've made it you try to rob my success?

No I ain't having that
No I ain't having that
It's time i took back what is mine

Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Watch out muthaf**kers, the King's back in town
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Now that i'm back who'll f**k with my Queen now?
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Made a return to bring my Kingdom around
Reclaim my throne take back my crown
Hit you right back when you all thought i was down

[mindofpoison]

*bumps thread*

[Nightvision]

How about...

1. Critting others work before expecting them to crit yours?

2. NOT bumping 2 threads at the same time, as it takes up space, and is considered hogging the front page (generally, once a song drops off the first page, it's never seen again unless bumped).

3. Nope, that's all - there were only two.

[mosher902]

you stole that "crockodile tears" from somewhere but i can't remember it stop stealing lyrics.

[mindofpoison]

How about...

1. Critting others work before expecting them to crit yours?

I have already 'critted' others work, several times.

2. NOT bumping 2 threads at the same time, as it takes up space, and is considered hogging the front page (generally, once a song drops off the first page, it's never seen again unless bumped).

yes because two threads can take up an entire page these days. i bumped these threads once each, only from the 2nd page. its not like i've bumped pagefuls of threads from the bottom of the forum.

3. Nope, that's all - there were only two.

excellent

you stole that "crockodile tears" from somewhere but i can't remember it stop stealing lyrics.

no i didnt.
i write that song over a year ago.
its all my own lyrics and any similarities with existing songs are coincidental.

[Nightvision]

with ten posts (two of which being bumps, the other two being the songs themselves, and one more being that post above) that means at the very most you'd have done 5 crits. I know for a fact at least one more of your posts was a request for a band name, and that you had another song, again with a post in there. That leaves two posts that could have been crits. One of those wasn't even in this forum (I checked your posts) and the last post was your crit. (which incidentally, was quite good, make sure you chase the guy you critted up - it's considered good manners to return crits, so make sure he does.

So, you tell me you've critted others work several times, when in fact you have in fact, posted one crit. Three songs, and one crit. A touch rude, no?

Now go do some more critiquing.

[nakiwiroda]

it is a really more superficial song from what i think. I wouldnt really use *** in it and it also is gramatically wrong in that part. But otherwise the message is okay from what i think

[mindofpoison]

with ten posts (two of which being bumps, the other two being the songs themselves, and one more being that post above) that means at the very most you'd have done 5 crits. I know for a fact at least one more of your posts was a request for a band name, and that you had another song, again with a post in there. That leaves two posts that could have been crits. One of those wasn't even in this forum (I checked your posts) and the last post was your crit. (which incidentally, was quite good, make sure you chase the guy you critted up - it's considered good manners to return crits, so make sure he does.

So, you tell me you've critted others work several times, when in fact you have in fact, posted one crit. Three songs, and one crit. A touch rude, no?

Now go do some more critiquing.

you actually wasted your time checking my posts to see if i lied?
:lol:

ok, i shall do more criticising. ;)