Song: Deceit and Lies

[Mango]

Just something i wrote. My friend thought it could be a song so i'm putting it through the finalizing stages and wondering what you all think. Crit away.

Verse: 1
Living in a world of deceit and lies
Where the only thing you get
Is the wrapped up surprise, Of knowing
That when the going gets tough
And the tough get going
The pretenders leave in turn showing
Who you can trust in you moment of need
Who to turn to when you heart starts to bleed

Chorus:
In a daze of deception
In a pool of doubt
Can’t get around Can’t get about
Can’t move without the fear, of
Hurting someone
So I stream with tears

Verse: 2
Climbed the tree of reliance
Just to get to the top
See my so called friends turn their heads
Have my tree cut down
My dreams turned to shreds
Have the people I cared for turn their backs on me
The people I care for cut down my tree

Chorus:
In a daze of deception
In a pool of doubt
Can’t get around Can’t get about
Can’t move without the fear, of
Hurting someone
So I stream with tears

Verse: 3
I’m laying on the earth
With thoughts gyrating through,
My head of utter confusion
My so called friends just a big illusion
Their suppose to easy my collapse
To turn the silence of pain
In to the cheer of claps

Chorus:
In a daze of deception
In a pool of doubt
Can’t get around Can’t get about
Can’t move without the fear, of
Hurting someone
So I stream with tears

[sexy_mexican_man]

i remember about a month ago my friend wrote up some lyrics with a very similar theme to that. They werent bad, but he burnt them any way, (he reckoned that if he wrote and burnt enough he'd eventually write somthing good).

On another subject totally, your lyrics arent bad.

[Havelock]

That ain't half bad. A little bit cliched (but then, what isn't these days?) but overall a nice song. 7.9/10.