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Jypee
04-09-2005, 01:00 PM
So, here it is. If you want me to crit ur work, give me a link to it and I'll do it.

Hollywood

Our words spoken are muted
The sigh and whispers galore
The walls burn with the help of treason
Holes performing the love of obsessions
Cars and planes never get you out of here
And we’re stuck on the side effect of our shyness
Recreate a universe of bubble gum naivety
And let our childhood manners flourish

Cause someway we’re gonna end up happy
Just like in our own Hollywood movie
Cocaine and whisky in our wedding bed
The roses are red and our star system is shrewd

Distinct lullabies hold our fears of us together
We never saw an image showing
Both our heads on the same frame
But does it matter if anyhow we knew it all
There’s no hopes beyond these eyes
Except for a foolish cheer from a candy lover kid

Cause someway we’re gonna end up happy
Just like in our own Hollywood movie
Cocaine and whisky in our wedding bed
The roses are red and our star system is shrewd

Take the curves,
It hurts less than hitting the wall
And the speed-o-meter tells the end
Is coming if you don’t take the way to Hollywood

Cause someway we’re gonna end up happy
Just like in our own Hollywood movie
Cocaine and whisky in our wedding bed
The roses are red and our star system is shrewd