"As I Remember" opinions?

[Adare]

This is a song by my buddy Will. I think it's a bit cheesy. What about you?

As I Remember by W.T. Mounce

verse one
They say "don't lie to yourself"
It's only gonna hurt you
They say that who you are
is only what you can do

prechorus one
fall asleep with the light on in my room
not knowing that these days will be over soon

chorus
I remember playing with my friends
i thought that these good times would never end
i wish i could start all over
without the weight of the world on my shoulders

verse two
they say don't make things harder
than they need to be
they say just go with the flow
don't anger anybody

prechorus two
get in line and just stay out of the way
live you life the same way everyday

chorus

weird humming thing

prochorus one

chorus

[Biancazzurri]

*i wish i could start all over Again

Nice theme... This is a song.. But I think it lacks something the song has to have.
You write too much about life itself, one stanza about it imo would be enough, you shoul write the other about parts in life, what would you want to change..

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