the Sun

[Fatal-Division]

here is a song I wrote a while back...I'll be posting most of the song's I've written in my abscence at the forum most likely...this is meant to be a *gasp gasp* screamo song..haha..I know..how despised the genre is....but it doesn't have to be typcial screamo..I wrote it while listening to When the Sun Sleeps alot (10 points to anyone who can find the line I stole from an old Underoath song in it)

The pain was shimmering
in my head
it startled
the gods that flow through

it’ll never work they said
but all they could do was prey
I knew the pain was only temporary
yet in you I find
that satiation can only be

the pain is shimmering
the tears are glimmering
the sun was beckoning
for the call to meet you
to greet you

and in the end it died
like a bullet flying bye
Its life was lived fast
searing through the sky
you'll never live again
just be my friend
and I'll show you

how it ends

like the way I show you
the water flew right through
the dam....its so weak
the dam...ill break it

covering my mind it just goes to find
a new place to hide but sun still shines
and its in wake I’m blind...

please forgive me
just as scared as you
thought I would be and
I can’t find it
but the sun guides it
towards me

so as I bleed hold the
gauze and make the wound
not kill me...

ill be back soon


thanks for reading..critique as you see fit..tell me about your idea's on how to sing it

[Fatal-Division]

hehe..thanks for the crit homies...

[Corupt2057]

I'll get back to this tonight man I gotta go get my sister from the movies but this will get a crit from me tonight ;-)