If Only We Both Knew

[Guitar Symphony]

(V1)
Yesterday, you told me that's the way you are
But I can't beleive it
You shoulda had a better start
I thought you knew the right's from the wrong
But apparently I don't either
Cuz we've been apart for so long

(C)
And I wonder
What goes through your head
Of all the words
That have been said
What your thought process is
Cuz it's not making any sense

(V2)
Today, you act like nothing happened
You give me smiles
But I shoulda called your bluff right then
I thought you had some complete regret
But I didn't know then
Cuz you don't want to try and forget

(Outro)
Under the influence;
That's just the way you are
You define yourself;
But you don't know who you reall are

NOTE: No, I did not break up with a girlfriend. It's about this girl who just can't seem to get the right values out of life.

[saudade]

Sounds heaps like the rhyming and structuarl style of The Streets. I liked it because of that fact, all i could hear was a pommy accent lightly rapping the lyrics. All thats wrong i rekon is the repeated "are"s in the last verse.

[Wanker]

Too many 'cuz's' for my taste.

[Electric Riley]

Pretty good. I like it alot. The above Streets mention is an excellent comparison. You need to get your ideas kind of tighter, and say them in less words without all the "Cuz"s, it looks too boy-band. Good ideas, keep working on it.

Now everyone go crit mine! Its called Universal Factor.

[Guitar Symphony]

Thanks guys, I'll keep working on it. I'm glad it came out right. These lyrics where really coming from da heart I suppose. I'll crit ur wink_wink