Inject Your Love (w/ Recording)

[El_Goodo]

I can’t sleep at all,
I can’t stand this withdrawal,
Im addicted,
I know it’s true,
You’re the one I keep coming back too
I need you baby again and again,
I gotta keep you coming until the end

Blisters on my fingers,
And blood in my vein,
Inject your love into me like cocaine

I can’t stay awake for much longer,
I don’t wanna go
But it’s just too late to get high now,
It’s too late,
To say goodbye now,
I can’t quit,
I wonder how,
I ever got along before.

Blisters on my fingers,
And blood in my vein,
Inject your love into me like cocaine

(Bridge)
Blisters on my fingers,
And blood in my vein,
Inject your love into me like cocaine
Blisters on my fingers,
And blood in my vein,
Inject your love into me like cocaine

Here's a link to listen to my acoustic recording of it. The lyrics are kinda boring in the second verse. But listen to the song before your crit.

Crit my;
Lyrics
Singing
Music

Inject Your Love (http://www.purevolume.com/noclass)

[AgrimXXXX]

Okay... I liked the lyrics a lot. Good flow and all that and I could relate to them.

You singing... could use some work I'm afraid. It's not herendous or anything, just a little forced and off key sometimes. Try relaxing a bit, other than that you have a good voice.

I really liked the guitar. A bit sloppy, with a few mess ups, but that's okay, we don't expect perfection. The music itself was nice.

The recording was crap. I couldn't hear the chorus over the crackling, all I could hear were the verses and bridges. Try recording it differently.

All in all it was a nice song. Cleaned up and recorded better, I'd say I'd listen to it. 7/10

[El_Goodo]

Nice thanks...yea I messed up a few times. I was improvising the singing...except the chorus, and I recorded it with a computer mic. Tommorow im gonna record it with my band...which sadly wont have that much better quality but there will be no crackling. And it was like the first time i played and sang it.

[Electric Riley]

First of all, cocaine is snorted, not injected. Apart from that, I like the lyrics a lot. Now, how do you work this linking contraption...

EDIT: Aight! I've listened to the song. Pretty **** recording, but I got the gist of it. The guitar is simple and effective, your singing isn't too bad.

Goork, keep perfecting it. I don't want to here heavy guitars in this, it sounds pretty good slow and acoustic. 7/10 from the Australian judge.

[El_Goodo]

You can dissolve it in water and inject it :)...I know my cocaine haha. Actually I looked it up before I recorded this cause I was thinking isnt it snorted

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

have a second part to the chorus and it will be amazing, as it stands 7.5/10 could be an 8.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

oh yeah and an interesting voice too!

[Corupt2057]

I'll be sure to check this out when I get to work monday morning, I don't have sound on this computer, but I won't say any crits on the lyrics til I hear how your trying to make them sound.. anyways seems like your getting some decent replies so it must be good I wish you the best and I really can't wait to hear it

by the way you can run through my newest called City Lights
it's got that Matchbox 20 feel to it ;-) I think..

[spankyone]

The lyrics are ok, but the music tends to fit the somewhat dark lyrics. I think another part to the chorus would work out better too, maybe an alternate last line. I really like the opening chord changes, reminds me of Blindside's song "Silence" which is one of my favorite of theirs. Not to to shabby but the bad recording makes it really hard to judge it.

[El_Goodo]

My band will be making an electric version of it soon. When it's done I will bump this thread again haha.

[white_riot]

Nice lyrics it flowed really good. I especially liked the first verse i thought that was really good. 7/10

[El_Goodo]

Nice lyrics it flowed really good. I especially liked the first verse i thought that was really good. 7/10

Woo I was waiting for you haha...I told you I would make the song better :thumb:

[El_Goodo]

have a second part to the chorus and it will be amazing, as it stands 7.5/10 could be an 8.

Do you have any idea's for another part. I've got nothing lol I cant get into the state of mind I was in when I wrote it.

[hurting]

ur lyrical skills sound a little like kurt cobain...and im a nirvana fan.. 7/10

[Shadows_of_Souls]

That was a good sound. I agree with hurting, that does have a nirvana/Cobain sound to it. The lyrics were good, the chorus could be better though. But, if you were going for a grunge sound then I would say keep the chorus as simple as possible, i.e. what you have right now. Great job.

[hurting]

maybe do some screaming in the middle like instead of singing the bridge...SCREAM IT!!!

[El_Goodo]

To Shadow of souls,
Thank you. The chorus is more complex in the electric version I do the sturmming then in the back there is a hammer on/pull off lick.

To Hurting,
Id like to but I dont have a very good range, and I havent really tried screaming. Im afraid to practice screaming with my parents here haha it might freighten them a bit. I may get my rhythm guitarist to scream since he can.

No to reveal some secrets...

I got the line "It's to late to get high now" from a song called "Up All Night" by the Counting Crows.

And I got the idea for the chorus from the beatles at the end of Helter Skelter John Lennon screams "I got Blisters On My Fingers"

Yep...just incase anyone cares.