Growing Season Of Autumn

[LivingDeadBoy]

Vivid forests filled with butterfly wings,
Spider legs, hazelnut and other queer things,
Blue moon, and smiling stars, they'll stay,
To watch the murder of the so-called fate.

Pulled the trigger, today I am trigger happy,
Eliminating edge of life and death, no fee,
Just sparkles on your teeth, and the bright blue eyes,
Just seas and the oceans, and a million lies.

Chorus:
Sing-song, the mockingbird is dead,
See-saw, the ending was met,
Sing-song, the leaves have been turned,
Golden red, It's growing season of autumn.

Oceans drowning in salt, and glass shards in my feet,
A million years and not one path, where we meet,
Times have been changing and ashes been spreading,
It's the growing season of autumn, the growing season of...

Chorus:
Sing-song, the mockingbird is dead,
See-saw, the ending was met,
Sing-song, the leaves have been turned,
Golden red, It's growing season of autumn.

Is it our fault that leaves turn that blushing red and die?
Is it our fault that gods turn roses into pitiful garbage.
Is it our fault that everyday something dies...
Didn't god create us all?

[deadreign 2]

I like it. The chorus is strong and important. It goes hand in hand with the verses which makes the lyrics become truly meaningful. the only thing i did not like is the last line. It branches off from the rest of the writing and takes the lyrics into a different direction. but overall it is good, i enjoyed it.

[mshort813]

I would have voted 5 but its not a choice so you get a 0.

[shadeddakotabassist]

Be back to crit this sometime around Tuesday next week...if I remember...I like the originality...and that's all I'm gonna say right now.

[white_riot]

I though it was ok, bored me a bit. the chorus was pretty good though.

[Noku]

It was rich in images but lacked some message or at least it wasn't that clear. It has very nice feel but you could have used more contrasts and other logical links in the text. The ending sucks, it is too different from the rest of the song... maybe you could make stronger themes for verses and mix them up in the ending or something like that. Anyway, nice work and the feel is very good.

[LivingDeadBoy]

The band version of this song.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/lethaldosemusic.htm

[shadeddakotabassist]

not gonna critique the lyrics, but I listened to the song. it seems a lot slower than should be...and the guitars could definitely be tightened up...drums weren't bad, simple but ok..but yeah...that's enough...not a winner in my book.