My Love for you.

[brokenfaith]

Tell me what you think of
this..

Chorus
Give Up It Never Really Matters,
You Can't Try For Two,
When Playing with Matches and The Roseary,
Just Give up,
But When your playing with Love Scream.

Trying Your Heart Out,
a pyro's burning hole inside,
blue blood screams,
while all the angels sing,
love is hostage,
some ones going to
blow your heart away.

Don't Ever want to believe,
that you weren't the one for me,
even if its true, i'll give up before,
I admit, were not right, we weren't
right, but you were right for me,
so i'll give up before I believe,
you were always everything.

Its Past Our Curfew,
the street lights are turning on,
its starting to get dark,
give me that look you gave me before,
tonight baby, let me relive the memories,
let me make you believe,
you were the one for me.

[The_One]

I like the last stanza. Nice imagery there. Not bad overall.

8/10

[Witty Username]

Odd capitalisation.

When Playing with Matches and The Roseary,
*Rosary

some ones going to
*someone's

I admit, were not right, we weren't
right, but you were right for me,
*we're. This section doesn't work for me. Too repetitive. It might come off well, but I doubt it.

Its Past Our Curfew
*it's
its starting to get dark,
*it's

Bleh.