NOTHING TO FEAR (please crit)

[schmitthead]

Nothing To Fear

Ive Been Workin So Hard, No Time To Think
‘till Your Hit By A Bus, Left To Sink
We Marvel Our Friendships

While Their Sharpening Their Blades
They Wait Until The Time Has Come
The Sentry Has Fallen, His Concience Fades

We See So Clearly
The Vision So Dark
Unrest, Vengence,
Time To Fuel The Spark

(chorus)

You Pull Me Away
Keep Me Sane
Day After Day
Whats To Explain

Don’t Sit Around, The Time Is Here
Stand Cocked And Loaded, Chips All In
Nothing To Fear

Your Day Will Come,
Guilt Will Overwelm You
Building Uncontrollably
Until The Fear And Cowardice
Consume You
You Have Nothing To Fear

(chorus)

[wrongnote85]

Your really trying to hard to ryhm this stuff. And you could really stand to loose the "hit by a bus, left to sink line". Don't stop or get discoraged though. Keep it up and you could find that you really have something. 4/10

please crit my "this isn't done, but tell me what you think..."

[ABulldog]

ditto ^^^