Please critique this song

[scream4Ualways16]

http://www.purevolume.com/autumnsloss


My bands been working on this song the last couple of practices and we recorded to hopefully get some feedback. This isnt the final version of the song its just more of a rough copy. We plan on adding the lyrics in this weekend, and recording it through a mixer. The recording is a live recording and the quality isnt that bad, so plz critique

[[zid]]

It´s a dead link!!!

[scream4Ualways16]

']It´s a dead link!!!

Sorry about that, it works now

[Implements Of Destruction]

The intro sound out of tune and very unpleasing to my ear. At :33 then it becomes ok. Then at :55 back to the out of tuneness. I didn't listen to the rest.

And stop posting your link in other threads.

[scream4Ualways16]

The intro sound out of tune and very unpleasing to my ear. At :33 then it becomes ok. Then at :55 back to the out of tuneness. I didn't listen to the rest.

And stop posting your link in other threads.

Well by you not listening to the whole thing your opinion is pointless. and the guitars were in tune and they were playing an octive apart from each other, Your opinion is useless because you obvously have no talent. Your just a 15 year old kid that thinks he can play an instrument, If you think you can do better send my a link of your band, or an attempt of a band and we will see who is better, Ignorance is bliss, We will see how this one turns out This song musicly is sound, the recording is bad but in theory its great. The Verse does sound a little cluttered but that can be fixed up with a mixer, by us just putting a mic in the middle of the room I and many others agree that is quite good, and if you dont believe me, check out some of the other local bands were competing against.

http://www.purevolume.com/aliveonarrival

No competition there

[spiderman546]

Well by you not listening to the whole thing your opinion is pointless. and the guitars were in tune and they were playing an octive apart from each other, Your opinion is useless because you obvously have no talent. Your just a 15 year old kid that thinks he can play an instrument, If you think you can do better send my a link of your band, or an attempt of a band and we will see who is better, Ignorance is bliss, We will see how this one turns out This song musicly is sound, the recording is bad but in theory its great. The Verse does sound a little cluttered but that can be fixed up with a mixer, by us just putting a mic in the middle of the room I and many others agree that is quite good, and if you dont believe me, check out some of the other local bands were competing against.

http://www.purevolume.com/aliveonarrival

No competition there

i dont know whats worse, your ego. you say you want crit and he gives you crit and you basicly say he is a stupid little kid. at 17 i think that is a pile of garbage. i wish i knew how to record and i would show you the fuk up. your band is garbage, and so is your attitude. you post on other threads for people to check out this crap. i can not see anyone liking this crap.

you say in theroy its good. well to hear it, it sucks.

you will prob have another spaz on me dissing your band but who cares. when you get some talent post again. hell i know people who have played there instruments for less then a year who could sound better then that.

pure garbage

EDIT: and i did listen to the whole thing, even 2 times, i think one of my ears started to bleed a bit from the crap it was hearing

edit # 2: you say in your post that you and many others think it sounds good? or is a good song? of course your friends would say that, they wouldnt want you to feel bad. you come on these forums to get crit and you complain about the comments being given. in all honestly i could not see anyone i know ever listening to this and liking it

[the tall guy]

dude im going to be honest here so don"t hold it against me...
first of all your guitars are way out of tune you should tune one with a tuner then tune the udda one to the first one about half way through you start dragging donkey idon"t know if this is the effect you wanted or not .any way you have a good over all sound .I dont know if what kind of amp youre useing but the intro parts sou really thin so try putting in more bass.thats about it dude

[...someone®]

I agree with most of the other comments - Sorry.

[scream4Ualways16]

Ya, The recording was bad, I just wanted an opinion as the song as a whole, as far as the theory part goes, its all in key, and were playing with octives alot, Im going to record it on a mixer so the quality is better. I got a gain boost so I think it will help the intro alot, and as far as the guitars being out of tune, they probably were, because we just threw a mic in the middle of the room and recorded it at the end of band practice, Like i said before i knew this was just a rough draft, and I wanted help on how to fix it, for you that made comments that helped to fix the song, thank you; your coments were helpful, but as far as people saying "it made my ears bleed" that was a little much, but Im going to record it threw a 16 channel mixer so we can edit each track and mix it better, and the final version will be tuned.

[thisisromance]

1st buy a tuner
then take up some sports or something, cause your music is definetly not going to get you laid

[Implements Of Destruction]

You have to learn how to take neg crit. Just because i didn't like it you start attacking me? And even if you were better then me doesn't that i should automatically like you or that my opinion become invalid.

and the guitars were in tune

as far as the guitars being out of tune, they probably were

Changed your mind pretty quickly...

[scream4Ualways16]

You have to learn how to take neg crit. Just because i didn't like it you start attacking me? And even if you were better then me doesn't that i should automatically like you or that my opinion become invalid.





Changed your mind pretty quickly...

By changing my mind i took the neg crit. :thumb:

[ClassicRockDrummer]

well, the first 33 seconds SUCK. here is why extremly hard to listen to becasue u are out of tune and ur drummer is doing a sucky job of keeping the beat steady. work on that. plus, i don't like that grudgy guitar sound, but that is just me. :33-:50 not bad, i like it. :50-1:16 back to the same crap from the first 33 seconds. don't like it. 1:16-end-not terrible, drummer got a little off again at the end. all together, not the greatest. needs work, but, with enough work and practice it could be good.

[scream4Ualways16]

well, the first 33 seconds SUCK. here is why extremly hard to listen to becasue u are out of tune and ur drummer is doing a sucky job of keeping the beat steady. work on that. plus, i don't like that grudgy guitar sound, but that is just me. :33-:50 not bad, i like it. :50-1:16 back to the same crap from the first 33 seconds. don't like it. 1:16-end-not terrible, drummer got a little off again at the end. all together, not the greatest. needs work, but, with enough work and practice it could be good.

ya I agree with the first 33 seconds do suck, and our drummer does go off beat alot and its annoying, but he's getting better, The grungy Guitar noise should go away once I get my new processor. so thx for the feedback :)