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matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 10:49 AM
This is the background to your life,
It's what you think you see sometimes. then it's gone.
It's times you weigh against the light,
You think well i'm all alone. no one knows.
When your heart drops to you throat,
It gets so hard to get this right. just give up.
This is the voice you sometimes hear,
When just sits back and takes it in.

In this world we work so hard for oursevles.
When i'm gone i get so nervous for my heart that it won't work. hard enough.

So with your foot pressed to the floor,
You feel the life through your arms. and you smile.
What will it ever take to make this go away. for ever.
Ever wonder where we are?
We're all so scared that we're all wrong. well we are.
So we're so thankful for our lives,
We show this all the time. do you know.

In this world we work so hard for oursevles.
When i'm gone i get so nervouse for my heart that it won't work. hard enough.

Hard enough. [x3]

If you wonder where we are,
And can you take anymore. cause i can.
Did you ever want to do,
Just a...

Is this what you wanted,
Is this what you thought you'd get,
Is it all you ever hoped,
Is that all your smiles got.
Is this what you wanted,
Is this what you thought you'd get,
Is it all you ever hoped,
Is that all your smiles got.

Is this what you wanted,
Is this what you thought you'd get,
Is it all you ever hoped,
Is that all your smiles got.

So now the sounds not coming and thats what great, it never can

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 11:19 AM
PLEASE CRIT!!!(CRIT 4 CRIT)and i will crit back!

kux0
02-07-2005, 11:47 AM
yoink stolen those lyrics will be in my next up coming single

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 11:52 AM
wat??

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 12:24 PM
Please Crit!!!!!

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 12:59 PM
ok please critique it people..i kno you've read it

Biancazzurri
02-07-2005, 01:21 PM
I know why don't you get the crits - Its to long! I mean no the length, when I read songs I read as long as i like the structure, the meaning the rhymes....
well there are rhymes, but lack of the rest underlines the length .. I mean its boring, What is it about ? 5/10

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 01:28 PM
yea i guess it is too long..thanx

kerazay
02-07-2005, 01:39 PM
its really really long man. it's good and i like the lyrics but it's too long. *says she with a long poem somewhere on the forum page lol* shorten it and i'll give it a proper crit 4 defs. n u gotta crit me back now lol! it's called what is beauty? (written on the bus) so if u crit me n shorten this i WILL DEFINITELY crit the newer version and thats a promise!

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 02:06 PM
kk thanx

GreenDayFrk88
02-07-2005, 02:47 PM
Much longer than ur other songs and i think that brings it down a bit. It's pretty kool though i guess 7/10

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 02:58 PM
thanx again for the critique

teleplayer101
02-07-2005, 03:09 PM
When your heart drops to you throat

How can your heart drop to your throat, from what i know of your heart is below your throat.

matt10lightning
02-07-2005, 05:28 PM
yea ok im gunna post a new song soon cuz this one isnt great..any more crit tho?