Horrible Parody... why did i write this?

[ABulldog]

Please Read this before reading the lyrics:

Sorry to everyone. I was SUPER bored before the Super Bowl, which I will probably watch only 15 minutes. I heard Dust in the Wind when I watch old school with Will Ferrell. For some reason I got these funny lyrics in my head. They aren't even good, but it wasted 10 minutes of boring pregame shows. Sorry to offend anyone who likes Kansas... To get the full effect you have to play the song while reading this.

Watchful eyes
Stare for a moment and then
They’re gone

Wedding dreams
Leave my mind in
Immoral ways

Love without bliss
All this is
Is love without bliss

Hold my dreams
With a hand of drunken
Curiosity

Take my heart
Press it with a blink of
Dishonesty

Love without bliss
All this is
Is love without bliss

Don’t stop now
You can last forever
If you really try

Now say goodbye
I’ll never see or
Hear from you again

Love without bliss
All this is
Is love without bliss


Yeah I feel ashamed to have written this.

[TCsmartie]

I dont know the song you are referring too. Kinda cool though what you have written. :-)

[ABulldog]

oh thanks. I mean I tried to make it good, but it was a parody. I don't know I was in the shower and had the song stuck in my head. I haven't even revised it myself. I just wrote it real quick and posted it so you people could have some fun.

I would like some more crits though.

[thedeadwalk!]

aren't parodies supposed to be funny? you had me really cranked up for a hellafunny ending but, it never came.

my major gripe with parodies is when they use a significant chunk of the song in their own. and you did that quite a bit. not too bad as a whole though, only:

Don’t stop now
You can last forever
If you really try

Now say goodbye
I’ll never see or
Hear from you again

^^^ that doesn't make sense. i understand this was quick, just letting ya know.