Yesterday

[Hadji]

This probably isn't my best songs lyrically, but I'll throw it up here anyways. Tell me what you think.

Yesterday

every day i wonder
up and down the street
asking for forgiveness
from every bum i see
but they just turn away
they've got nothing to say
they just walk away
like yesterday

every night i slumber
thinking of what could be
i want to atone for
simply being me
and i don't know what to do
everything i'm going through
i don't know what to say
like yesterday

and i'll just turn away
i've got nothing to say
i'll just walk away
like yesterday

every time i wake up
in the middle of the night
i want to throw in the towel
just give up the fight
and there's nothing left for me
guess this is how i'm supposed to be
and there's nothing left to say
like yesterday

[ABulldog]

****it. I had a nice post for you, but accidently closed down my browser. Anyways. It is a decent song. Not great. 7/10. It delivered what it promised and that was a song about yesterday.

[ClayTheJ]

Me likey 8/10

I like how you refer back to yesterday alot of times but some parts of the endings don't seem to fit.

[BassManXtreme]

every day i wonder
up and down the street
asking for forgiveness
from every bum i see

I love the flow of this.

but they just turn away
they've got nothing to say
they just walk away
like yesterday

*Maybe I'm not saying it right, but this kills the flow for me.

every night i slumber
thinking of what could be
i want to atone for
simply being me

Love the lyrics, same flow as before so thats great too.

and i don't know what to do
everything i'm going through
i don't know what to say
like yesterday


*

and i'll just turn away
i've got nothing to say
i'll just walk away
like yesterday

*

every time i wake up
in the middle of the night
i want to throw in the towel
just give up the fight

Not very strong lyrically, but I still love the flow.

and there's nothing left for me
guess this is how i'm supposed to be
and there's nothing left to say
like yesterday

*

[thedeadwalk!]

i hate it when songs have titles that already are one [especially for a great song]. i also, hate such direct rhyming as in this song, it just doesn't seem natural for someone to express themself only through words sounding the same, brings it down for me, but that's a personal taste. however, this is a good concept, and the repitition of "like yesterday" was great. a good idea here, but i think it can be better realized.