Too Late

[Shinedown89]

You were everything to me
The only thing I cared about
It Just wansnt enough to save us
I feel...


All Alone
I dont need you
Cant Live without
I hate you
I pushed you down
You changed
Its too late
Doesnt matter anymore


Before we met I was Dead
A nothing walking cold
I was in an eternal silence
Then you opened my eyes to a world i never knew
I thought what we had was real
Now Im..


All Alone
I dont need you
Cant live without
I hate you
I pushed you down
You changed
Its too late
Doesnt matter anymore


What happened to us?
What changed you?
How was i supposed to feel
that day you left me for that fuc*ing loser
I hated myself
Why do i still love you?
I was...


All Alone
I dont need you
Cant live without
I hate you
I pushed you down
You changed
Its too late now
Doesnt matter anymore


Then you came back to me
I remember the day so well
Your face looked so perfect in the rain
why did you do this to me?
I cant

No..


Get out of here
I dont want to see you
What do you want?
I gave you everything
It just wansnt enough
Why do i still love you?



Alright..thats it..i just started it a while ago and i thought it was pretty good but tell me what u think. ill take any suggestions..
im still workin on it so tell me if u think something would sound better

thanks...

TJ

[Jonahtan]

Its pretty good, flows well, but i was wondering... What kind of music is this for? The chorus seems like a rap while the verse is rockish i think.

[Shinedown89]

its meant to be hard rock/ maybe even alittle emo..

[Jonahtan]

Ok, i can kinda see where that would fit. With the choppier chorus as a heavier "hard-rock" type part with the verses as emo-ish. Actually that would be neat.

You were everything to me
The only thing I cared about
It Just wansnt enough to save us
I feel...

Last line would build and then break into chorus. Fine introduction to the sung. Maybe consider making it the same length line-wise as the verses but could depend on structure of song when played.

All Alone
I dont need you
Cant Live without
I hate you
I pushed you down
You changed
Its too late
Doesnt matter anymore

Not a bad chorus, nothing overly interesting, could really go either way. The quality of this song really would depend on how it was preformed.

Before we met I was Dead
A nothing walking cold
I was in an eternal silence
Then you opened my eyes to a world i never knew
I thought what we had was real
Now Im..

Not bad, good lead into chorus again. Maybe say "i lived in eternal silence" instead of i was in eternal silence...

What happened to us?
What changed you?
How was i supposed to feel
that day you left me for that fuc*ing loser
I hated myself
Why do i still love you?
I was...

Lots of rhetorical questions in this verse. Again could go either way depending on how it's preformed. Howeved i pretty much never condone the use of swearing in songs. Not because i dont approve of swearing, on the contrarity i can be quite fould mouthed, but it's kinda cliche'd nowadays.

Then you came back to me
I remember the day so well
Your face looked so perfect in the rain
why did you do this to me?
I cant

No..


Get out of here
I dont want to see you
What do you want?
I gave you everything
It just wansnt enough
Why do i still love you?

I can kinda see the suspence in this section. this is a good way to end the song. These two verses are the best two in the song. Good expression, etc.

Overall i would give a 7.5/10. Not bad for the first copy of the song. With revisions and maybe some added imagery this could be a good song. Also the way it is preformed would really show whether it would be good or not.