First (Love) Song ... Opinions welcome!!!

[mvanin]

Soft acoustic guitar serenade...

LOST IN YOUR EYES

When we're together
You make the weather better
Your sunny smile clears the darkest skies
The corners of your mouth are lifting
Storms are shifting, grey clouds drifting
But I hardly notice 'cause I'm mesmorized
By your eyes

When you are by my side
I couldn't lie to you, even if I tried
And time flies right by
When I'm lost in your eyes

And if I asked you
What your favourite part of the night was
It was just so I'd know
What it was that I was doing right
And if you asked me the same question
I would tell you this:
It was when I looked into your eyes
It was the first time that we kissed

When you are by my side
I couldn't lie to you, even if I tried
And time flies right by
When I'm lost in your eyes

[Sword2020]

You know, it seems that this love actually conveys something that so many of them don't and that thing is love. It flows very well, though I'm not big on soft acoustic serenades. You could never play this with a band I don't think, and I doubt you could perform it, unless you're James Taylor or something. Anyway, good song,even though it is a love song. Could crit mine please, it's The Amercan Dream. Thanks.