time wont to tell

[fingers07]

Hi im new so please dont be to harsh

so i take this gun
and put it to my head
you know your life is
better of when im dead

your taste in my mouth
my heart on your sleeve
they i used to felt
when you made me believe

i can see it in your eyes
the one that you despise
the love that grew fonder
is faidin ever so far away

so i take this gun
and put it to my head
you know your life better off
now that i am dead

[Nightvision]

Just out of interest, is English your first language?

[Sword2020]

Hi im new so please dont be to harsh

so i take this gun
and put it to my head
you know your life is
better of when I am dead

your taste in my mouth
and my heart upon your sleeve
I remeber how they
when you helped me to believe

i can see it in your eyes
the one that you despise
the love that grew fonder
is faidin ever so far away
(this is fine if it has a different riff than the rest)

so i take this gun
and put it to my head
you know your life is better off
now that I am dead

I put some changes that I thought would help it ini my edit. I hope that helps,and it's not that bad. It could be short, but I love some short songs. Will please crit mine, American Dream? Thanks