IOWNU200
01-13-2005, 03:13 PM
Alright, so i wrote a poem for my girlfriend. I would just like to see what you guys think about it. Think she'll like it, ect. Maybe a few womans opinions as well. Anyways here goes:
There I stood alone in a secluded corner, facing the wall
No purpose, No direction, No reason to go on
Do you know what it was like?
Roaming the empty halls with that same sad song on my lips
Never knowing appreciation, Never knowing any love
And as I was beggining to fall out of everything I'd ever known
but you never gave up on me, even though i was not kind
You kept on pushing until I felt how I do now
You changed my tune and brightened my day
Such a feeling to feel when you've only learned one way
I think about your smile every time i start to fade
so when I'm all alone know that you can always be there
basking in the love I so hoped we share
You fullfil the love that I needed to function
Holding onto my hand, you helped me into the world
You told me that I had talents that you couldn’t believe
You told me that when you were with me you shook with joy
I thought to myself on its irony because I could never make myself happy
But with you my world is full of joy,
you’ll turn the rain to sun at the thought of your voice
You give me a different spin on life, thinking of you will always bring out the beauty
You told me that you liked my outlook on life, but it’s only that way because of you
I told you that you were my inspiration, and this was the truth
You instill in me a new reason to live and a new reason to fight
I was always a fighter, yes you told me yourself
But without you the battle I fought could not be won
You bring out the very best in me and now I believe
That with you I can make it, and with you I can win
So I’ll tell you down on my knees
That you’re the one that I’ve been waiting for
Your very presence is etched into my soul, and you’re there to save me
And you’ve all along been fueling the engine on my drive to redemption
You’ll sit right next to me, there to guide me
Never will your good intentions lead me astray
And weather or not you say anything at all
Just the thought of you can cushion my fall
And I’ll ask you down on my knees
To tell me that you’re here for me forever
Because your everlasting love draws me in
And you are the warmth and comfort that fills my heart
For you took this chance to give me a chance
And now I know I told you I don’t believe in God
But man, do you fit the description well
And when I told you that you had the qualities of God
It was true, So I’d like to propose this question to you
Would it be alright if I were to call you God?
So this may seem strange to you, and i've never done this before
But may I ask for just one kiss, because I want you to feel just what I do
And i want you to know everything that's in my heart and that's in my soul
Because it's hard to bear this weight alone
So I'll pray to you down on my knees
That this won't ever stop occuring
The joy that resonates in my soul is unmatched
and you are the source of all my happiness
Then, a smile breaks on my face
because even the slightest thought of your face
keeps me trudging on through the days
And i'll try hard for eternity with you
Just promise me that this love is mutual
Because I don't know if I could make it without you
For the absence of your face would make my days run dark
And just looking into your face everyday
makes me realize that I love you, my God
There I stood alone in a secluded corner, facing the wall
No purpose, No direction, No reason to go on
Do you know what it was like?
Roaming the empty halls with that same sad song on my lips
Never knowing appreciation, Never knowing any love
And as I was beggining to fall out of everything I'd ever known
but you never gave up on me, even though i was not kind
You kept on pushing until I felt how I do now
You changed my tune and brightened my day
Such a feeling to feel when you've only learned one way
I think about your smile every time i start to fade
so when I'm all alone know that you can always be there
basking in the love I so hoped we share
You fullfil the love that I needed to function
Holding onto my hand, you helped me into the world
You told me that I had talents that you couldn’t believe
You told me that when you were with me you shook with joy
I thought to myself on its irony because I could never make myself happy
But with you my world is full of joy,
you’ll turn the rain to sun at the thought of your voice
You give me a different spin on life, thinking of you will always bring out the beauty
You told me that you liked my outlook on life, but it’s only that way because of you
I told you that you were my inspiration, and this was the truth
You instill in me a new reason to live and a new reason to fight
I was always a fighter, yes you told me yourself
But without you the battle I fought could not be won
You bring out the very best in me and now I believe
That with you I can make it, and with you I can win
So I’ll tell you down on my knees
That you’re the one that I’ve been waiting for
Your very presence is etched into my soul, and you’re there to save me
And you’ve all along been fueling the engine on my drive to redemption
You’ll sit right next to me, there to guide me
Never will your good intentions lead me astray
And weather or not you say anything at all
Just the thought of you can cushion my fall
And I’ll ask you down on my knees
To tell me that you’re here for me forever
Because your everlasting love draws me in
And you are the warmth and comfort that fills my heart
For you took this chance to give me a chance
And now I know I told you I don’t believe in God
But man, do you fit the description well
And when I told you that you had the qualities of God
It was true, So I’d like to propose this question to you
Would it be alright if I were to call you God?
So this may seem strange to you, and i've never done this before
But may I ask for just one kiss, because I want you to feel just what I do
And i want you to know everything that's in my heart and that's in my soul
Because it's hard to bear this weight alone
So I'll pray to you down on my knees
That this won't ever stop occuring
The joy that resonates in my soul is unmatched
and you are the source of all my happiness
Then, a smile breaks on my face
because even the slightest thought of your face
keeps me trudging on through the days
And i'll try hard for eternity with you
Just promise me that this love is mutual
Because I don't know if I could make it without you
For the absence of your face would make my days run dark
And just looking into your face everyday
makes me realize that I love you, my God