Drummer's Song

[Akehuka7_II]

my drummer wrote this song last night and sent it to me...
please crit, help improve, whatever...

take more time to analyze
the world and all its problems
politcally correct mr moustache
do you think you can solve them?

when stupidity is status quo
morality at an all-time low
idiots swinging to and fro
dont attempt this song at home

i didnt mean any offense
to gays or muslims or chinks
does majority mean to have less rights?
your policies really stink

[thirdeyeblindislit]

Um... Ok well the song was very intrusting I have to give it that. You may just want to think of an all new idea, because politic songs are either good or bad and not to be offensive but this one isnt good. I didnt like the mr. mustache part. That didnt really make any sense. You are going to really want to go back and rethink this. But nice try. :thumb: 3.7/10.

[The_One]

I actually kinda like it. It's amusing. I just don't like the Mr. Moustache part. It's like you're pulling a Jack the Skeleton on us.

i didnt mean any offense
to gays or muslims or chinks
This verse didn't seem to stick with the flow. But overall, it's alright I guess.

7/10