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[Silverhammer]

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[Devilinferno2]

Sun comes up another day
Wasted by my sorrow
I don’t know why it has to stay
I don’t have time to borrow

Good intro, but its abruptly cut off, add something after the last line, to make it flow. its too sudden. 6/10

Lines and lines of drawn out lines
Connects them to the ends
I wish that I could trade with them
So I may have no end

This doesn't really makes sense, "trading" and "end". Rephrase your entire idea perhaps. 4/10

(Chorus)
Sun comes up another day
Wasted by my sorrow
I don’t know why it has to stay
I don’t have time to borrow

Turn to sit, sit around
Stare up to the sky
Contemplate what’s going down
Down I fall, oh me, oh my

"oh me, oh my" is out of place. 5/10

(Chorus)
Sun comes up another day
Wasted by my sorrow
I don’t know why it has to stay
I don’t have time to borrow

My time is short I cannot stay
I fear too much for my friend
Death’s his name and I do fear
That he wont see his end

Rephrase this entire thing 5/10


(Chorus)
Sun comes up another day
Wasted by my sorrow
I don’t know why it has to stay
I don’t have time to borrow

I don’t have time to borrow
I don’t have time to borrow

50%. Ok. Its not a bad song. Just rephrase all the ideas of the song. strengthen it, deliver it well. spend more time and effort in this, and it'd be fine.