focus in your time of chaos me and bigskinny06 wrote it (give me somthing)

[espf-250htd06]

idk if this is a whole song or part of a song but its pretty much all about the title and first line tell me what you thank






Focus in your time of chaos
While all comes crashing down
Clear your mind of voices
When madness is falling down
When the demons are running to you
Stop time and get lost in concentration

Your life flashes before your eyes
As you over come your greatest weakness
Drive past the fear that makes you panic
And look past all this mass confusion
Look at terror and face him like a man
He is the one I am yet to overcome

Let go of the emotion
And depart from the rails that guide you
Into this life of pure pandemonium
Clear your mind of voices
Focus in your time of chaos
Now…..stop time and get lost in concentration

[...someone®]

I thought it was pretty good - There are clever little bits in there... - Like the whole idea of the song...

Well Done!

[Devilinferno2]

Focus in your time of chaos
While all comes crashing down
Clear your mind of voices
When madness is falling down
When the demons are running to you
Stop time and get lost in concentration

Great intro, but "down" and "Down" don't fit, i don't mind the ryhming, but it sounds odd. i rather you change the word and make it not ryhme at all. 7/10

Your life flashes before your eyes
As you over come your greatest weakness
Drive past the fear that makes you panic
And look past all this mass confusion
Look at terror and face him like a man
He is the one I am yet to overcome

Another strong verse. 7/10

Let go of the emotion
And depart from the rails that guide you
Into this life of pure pandemonium
Clear your mind of voices
Focus in your time of chaos
Now…..stop time and get lost in concentration

well up to here, i'd say, criting individual verses does this song no justice, it has to read as a piece, the entire piece fits together, which makes a great song.

i'd say 75% for this.

[espf-250htd06]

thanks for the crits

[espf-250htd06]

bump