Golden Paradise

[formchaos]

Running like your eye shadow
Tears fall like rain
Lurking in my shadow
Hiding from the pain

Taste of paradise willingly accepted
Eaten out of a golden spoon

I am inside you like a soul
Fill you up just like a glass
Half full emptyness of hope
Spreading throughout the mass

[slpntrx5]

I pretty much like it except for the 1st and 3rd lines. I dont think it sounds very good to rhyme "shadow" with "shadow"