darkness

[dracma]

I fall into my darkness
I hate the light and I love my madness

Now your eyes have seen what’s hidden in the dark
Can you still remember what was going on?
are you still stoned, so stoned afraid of death
I dare you to look into my eyes again

Madness seemed to grab me in his loving hands
With the dreams of men that were already gone
Where the good and evil forces seem to fight
To dismiss the sin that we are sticking on

I see dark
In your eyes
I see dark
In your eyes

Darkness is my loving child afraid of day
Doomed down is meant to be between heaven and hell
Darkness is my life I can’t live black and white
If you’d be my eyes just ride me trough the night

A side of me is hidden that you’ve never seen
Don’t be afraid of me just let me take your hand
Cross the bridges with me to the other side
Just remember you might never ever come back

I see dark
In my sky
I see dark
All the time

Dark I see
Dark I need

[Devilinferno2]

I fall into my darkness
I hate the light and I love my madness

i seldom see people write songs in present tense. "Fell into darkness" is more apropriate.

Now your eyes have seen what’s hidden in the dark
Can you still remember what was going on?
are you still stoned, so stoned afraid of death
I dare you to look into my eyes again

"so stoned and afraid of death". otherwise, good one. 7/10


Madness seemed to grab me in his loving hands
With the dreams of men that were already gone
Where the good and evil forces seem to fight
To dismiss the sin that we are sticking on

Nothing to comment. 7/10

I see dark
In your eyes
I see dark
In your eyes

"i see darkness" would be better. "i see dark" doesn't make much sense.

Darkness is my loving child afraid of day
Doomed down is meant to be between heaven and hell
Darkness is my life I can’t live black and white
If you’d be my eyes just ride me trough the night

"doomed down" ...perhaps you could use another phrase for that. 7/10

A side of me is hidden that you’ve never seen
Don’t be afraid of me just let me take your hand
Cross the bridges with me to the other side
Just remember you might never ever come back

Nothing to comment. 7/10


I see dark
In my sky
I see dark
All the time

Dark I see
Dark I need


Around 70%. Quite a good song, just change those little chucks of small paragraphs lying here and there.