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sidkurtloserfreak2x3
12-28-2004, 09:23 PM
i started this song now i have no idea how to finish it any ideas?

To look upon the eyes of an angel
Both alone in a crowd Makes my heart cry
Hurts me more than searing pain, pain of needing
Pain of wanting and staying while I look upon
I look upon the eyes of an angel

Love and hope are the angels of hell
To be alive is to hope to gain love
Which causes pain and suffering
Until both are found

SarcasticVirtue
12-28-2004, 09:26 PM
1) What is the song about?
2) If I wrote lyrics for this, they would be mine and I wouldn't let you use 'em.
3) My idea, finish this using some words.
4) It looks like you're just writing here, if so, scrap it and write something with meaning.

MisterXIsSilent
05-12-2005, 08:17 AM
Like the other guy said

1)Add more
2)Write a chorus that pulls the audience in and keeps them interested
3)Work On Flow A Little
4)This seems like a poem, but hey thats just me