Chorus to Cry for

[TexasRocker]

I finally get to write a song with real inspiration. Rather than trying to figure out what emotional state i could be, would be or should be in, I know now! Oh well here's the chorus that has come out of that aforementioned inspiration.

I just wanna love you
Wish you'd let yourself go
I'll break down the wall you've built inside
I'm tired of bein' the last to
Give up even when I know
I'm always the one who's left behind

Please tell me what you think

[StormX]

it's rhyme pattern is weird (abcabd) and it's cliche to the core.

[TexasRocker]

try abcabc, but thanks anyway