Dreams:pleez rate

[Infinatedestiny]

Planted in the soil of time are my nightmares ready to flower.
Buried in the dark lie the fears that unveil at dusk.
Every night brings about its fear and im stripped of all my power.
Scared to fall into the pool of the demons and their lust.

Dreams in the night, Burning me alive.
But the Dreams in the day, Push the nights away.
Dreams in the night, come back to haunt my life.
But its dreams...Clinching my arm.

Dreams the only thing that keeps my holding on.
Dreams the only hand thats keep me hanging on.
Dreams the only hope that keep me holding on.
But the nightmares remain in my eyes.

Too scared to fall asleep become locked inside scenes hell.
Scared to fall asleep and wake up in nightmare.
Dreams have become reality i cant tell which one is real.
I've stumbled towards death and looked him straight in his glare.

Dreams in the night, Burning me alive.
But the Dreams in the day, Push the nights away.
Dreams in the night, come back to haunt my life.
But its dreams...Clinching my arm.

Dreams the only thing that keeps my holding on.
Dreams the only hand thats keep me hanging on.
Dreams the only hope that keep me holding on.
But the nightmares remain in my eyes.
And the darkness rules my life.

Walls are closing in.
The sea begins to rise.
Strength is wearing thin.
And theres nowhere left to hide.

Dreams in the night, Burning me alive.
But the Dreams in the day, Push the nights away.
Dreams in the night, come back to haunt my life.
But its dreams...Clinching my arm.

Dreams the only thing that keeps my holding on.
Dreams the only hand thats keep me hanging on.
Dreams the only hope that keep me holding on.
But the nightmares remain in my eyes.
And the darkness rules my life.
I am falling in,
Deep under my skin,
But the dreams remain in my life.

[Infinatedestiny]

this i perhaps one of my most straight forward songs iv written. u may not understand it as parts become confusing. basically there r 2 types of dream. u may get confused cuz one line states 'Dreams the only thing that keeps my holding on.' and i also have written 'Dreams the only thing that keeps my holding on.'. u basically have to read through and sort the 2 types of dream. the song is about a guy who is haunted by something in his past and 1 type of dream is saving him and the other is trying to pull him down. This song was called Twisted nightmares but is now changed to 'dreams'. cud u suggest wat may be better?

[666th DesolateD Dream]

Wow. great song. i havent heard this yet. u'll have to show us how it goes but if its anything as good as the rest its gonna be sweet

[perry589]

A vast improvement from "And of an Era". I think this is because the song is about something different, and the imagery is better. The song is not about something some many bands have written about. I think this song is good. The flow is good, the imagery is good, the verses are good, the chorus is good and the outro is better.
Overall 8/10. i would like to suggest the title,"Devil's dream".

[mysterychick]

Wow, nice job, i really like this song a lot. Um, i hate to say it, but i dont have anything to really criticize on this song, theres nothing wrong with it. It seems a bit long, but hey songs can be long. What kind of music would you put with this song? Just out of curiosity.

Nice job, and i mean NICE. lol

Overall 8.2/10 :)

[666th DesolateD Dream]

thanx alot u 2 people. really helpful...its great to hav people givin crits rather than just chatting on my threads. Devils dream sounds like a good title. u say its a long song but its actually about 4mins-4:30mins. Its quite fast. not overly fast cuz that sumtimes ruins it. its a heavy metal songs with a solo in and a nice bit of harmony with guitars in the middle. If u listen to Iron Maiden then its a little bit like 2 minutes 2 midnite. Most of its pretty original. Its a pretty heavy type song but the chorus is lighter. Its not really a bashy song at all. So anyway...thanx alot. il crit ur stuff some time soon.

[jurialmunkey]

Ok.

So are you or are you not the same person as InfinteDestiny... First you act like you are different, then you say that it's nice to have people giving crits rather than just chatting on your threads under the name 666th DesolateD Dream...

Did you just make a really big slip up or can you explain this???

[theredwonder]

infinate destiny = busted :smokes and watches with a grin:

[mshort813]

you have at least 6 accounts youve been banned on...Aweome!

[666th DesolateD Dream]

yes and i still have another 8. my m8 set them up in about a minute cuz hes a computer geek and knows everything. bastard. but...hes quite strange as hes now living withhis boyfirend and his boyfriends wife and kids....wo...noyt good

[Nightvision]

a minute? wow, he must be super-h@X0r-kung-fu-ninja-stealthy! I wish I was that cool!

two words. IP BAN.

[limemachine]

Do you live on the forums, is that why you have so many accounts. Just drop it .