i got a song

[thefatman90]

i wrote this song about myself....well kinda....anyway...its the first and only song ive wrote



"the fat man had to run"


it was getting late
he hadnt ate
but the fat man had to run!
the fat man had to run
he tripped he fell
dude your gettin a dell
the fat man had to run
he wanted a honey bun
but the fat man had to run!!

oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run
oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run

hes off he stopped
look what he dropped....
its a snickers
he just ripped his knickers?
he stopped for more food
hes running around in the nude
then the fat man had to run
oh yeah the fat man had to run

oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run
oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run

now his back hurts
and his butt squirts
he was gonna be late
HE JUST ATE!!
so the fat man had to run
when were out havin fun
i saw a fat man on the run
oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run!

oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run
oh the fat man had to run
the fat man had to run

the fat mans on the run
he ran over a nun
fat man on the run
dont drop your cinimon bun
oh! fat man has to run
that FAT MAN had to run
oh the fat man had to run
that fat man had to run!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!

[H to the ickle]

GOD ALMIGHTY

That's a great laugh and I really hope thats the way it was intended.

Based on song writing standards - 2/10

Based on Laugh-o-Meter - 8/10

[thefatman90]

GOD ALMIGHTY

That's a great laugh and I really hope thats the way it was intended.

Based on song writing standards - 2/10

Based on Laugh-o-Meter - 8/10


yeah its supposed to make u laugh...and well im not a songwriter...but a drummer but hey i like it

[morrissey]

Why are people like you allowed to write songs? Honestly?

It wasn't funny, and it wasn't good. I've only ever seen one funny song on here, it was called "Mountain Dew" or something by Sloth. All of the other ones have been complete and utter trash, without a single redeemable asset (no, not even humour).

I would suggest giving up, but people like you are often persistent.

*sigh*

0/10

[thefatman90]

Why are people like you allowed to write songs? Honestly?

It wasn't funny, and it wasn't good. I've only ever seen one funny song on here, it was called "Mountain Dew" or something by Sloth. All of the other ones have been complete and utter trash, without a single redeemable asset (no, not even humour).

I would suggest giving up, but people like you are often persistent.

*sigh*

0/10



well hell lighten up....

[hotcod32]

its not funny becuse its funny... and its not funny becuse its bad... even if being bad (i hope) is the point... basicly it sucks what ever way you look at it

[morrissey]

I am in a light mood... and if you had written a semi-decent song, it might just have made me chuckle. But you failed. Nothing against you, just a trashy song. Better luck next time, m'boy.

EDIT: hotcod summed up my argument in a nice, easily accessible manner. Read his post, if you still have any questions, I feel sorry for you.

[thefatman90]

its not funny becuse its funny... and its not funny becuse its bad... even if being bad (i hope) is the point... basicly it sucks what ever way you look at it


its not funny becuse its funny?
even if being bad (i hope) is the point....yeah pretty much

[thefatman90]

I am in a light mood... and if you had written a semi-decent song, it might just have made me chuckle. But you failed. Nothing against you, just a trashy song. Better luck next time, m'boy.


it wasnt really intended to be good...its just theyre for ppl who have a greater sense of humor to enjoy

[morrissey]

... well, I've been told I have a dry, cutting wit (seriously, people say that, don't ask why...). So this song wasn't destined for an audience of my ilk. Oh well. 12-year olds will soak it up, surely. :wave:

[thefatman90]

... well, I've been told I have a dry, cutting wit (seriously, people say that, don't ask why...). So this song wasn't destined for an audience of my ilk. Oh well. 12-year olds will soak it up, surely. :wave:

well....i doubt 12 year olds will "soak it up" as u put it....especially since i dont kno any 12 year olds....but hey i guess thats y i drum and dont write songs

[H to the ickle]

well....i doubt 12 year olds will "soak it up" as u put it....especially since i dont kno any 12 year olds....but hey i guess thats y i drum and dont write songs

You sure as hell spell at a 12 year old level. Good God, where is the public education system when you need it?

If you want people to read and listen, don't write like an autistic sea cucumber.

Sheesh.

/end flame

[RobTheFunkyBassist]

Heh. An autistic sea cucumber, now there's an insult to be proud of.
There's plenty of opportunity to write good, humorous songs, but really you've got to put some effort to change the whole dry, repetitive feel that seems to tagged to every 'funny' song. It's kinda long. Shorten it write down to 1 minute at tops, then you could shove it somewhere on a disc as a quick joke song....
Rob

[IOWNU200]

12-year olds will soak it up, surely.

Hey, I take that as an insult, I have higher standards :P

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

it wasnt really intended to be good...its just theyre for ppl who have a greater sense of humor to enjoy

and his butt squirts

i can see why you made that arguement :rolleyes:

[morrissey]

Hey, I take that as an insult, I have higher standards :P

Haha sorry, I was trying to be generous. 10-year olds, then?

BTW, are you 12?

[IOWNU200]

13, but close enough, 10 works :)