Hope

[grasshopper]

Hope

She’s just too good to be true
And that’s why I’m on the phone to you
All my smiles are fading, my hopes they are degrading
Cause I bet all I had left on you.

She’s a flicker of life in this dead place
And the next crease of age on my face
All my hopes are disappearing; she’s listening without hearing
I’m last in this impossible race.

Hope just left here today
She’s gone, gone far away
As I watch her taking the blame
I smile, even though it is a shame.

I’m getting too old to be bold
So I’m acting off what I’ve been told
My patience is getting shorter; I’ve given her no quarter
My faith isn’t worth its weight in gold.

(chorus)

So low
I’ve descended
So high
I wish to be
So it’s hello
To a goal that’s been ended
So there’s
No chance for you and me

So it’s farewell to you my sweet
And the situations that we never did meet
My dreams are all but ended; my mind is far from mended
As I set back off upon this faithless street.

(chorus)

[Nalphe]

She’s just too good to be true
And that’s why I’m on the phone to you
All my smiles are fading, my hopes they are degrading
Cause I bet all I had left on you.

the second line, "im on the phone to you" seems wired for me....
and, the third line, it's better to place a comma after "hopes"
the last one, i know what u mean actually, but it's like....erm....the meaning isnt that clear....

She’s a flicker of life in this dead place
And the next crease of age on my face
All my hopes are disappearing; she’s listening without hearing
I’m last in this impossible race.

this is good, third line's my fav....she's listening without hearing, shows out the sadness...the last line, if u could change it, it doesnt fit in this stanza (well, that's only my opinion, u can't ignore it .... ;) )

Hope just left here today
She’s gone, gone far away
As I watch her taking the blame
I smile, even though it is a shame.

slowly, u're driving the sadness to anger, a very good chorus, strong YET emotional! ( u remind me of a song called "vermilion" by slipknot..my fav song! take a look at the lyric, not bad too! )

I’m getting too old to be bold
So I’m acting off what I’ve been told
My patience is getting shorter; I’ve given her no quarter
My faith isn’t worth its weight in gold.

i hate to say, i dislike the first line, (too old to be bold??)
others good

So low
I’ve descended
So high
I wish to be
So it’s hello
To a goal that’s been ended
So there’s
No chance for you and me

i like this one: "So it’s hello
To a goal that’s been ended"

So it’s farewell to you my sweet
And the situations that we never did meet
My dreams are all but ended; my mind is far from mended
As I set back off upon this faithless street.

good ending......by the way, i think u should change ur title...u didnt say so much about ur hope....

good lyric, hope the music will be great !!!
6.5/10 : easy to understand, emotional 'twist', just nice for a song :D
better if u focus more on ur feelings, describe it...but dont leave out the story as well

[Dingbats]

Good! I didn't like "too old to be bold" either though. Neither did I like the double rhyme "you" - "you" in the first verse. But I like the chorus and the bridge a lot, the repetition of "so" is great. I think 6.5 is a too low rating for this song.