Happy Weekend

[SparrowsNirvana]

I wrote this a few years ago, and i've been fiddling around with it ever since. I came from my friend challenging me to write a happy song. Needless to say, i failed miseralbly. Please be totally honest, cos i think it's probably a bit cliche.

Happy weekend, no more tears
Happy weekend, no more tears

Hey don’t worry baby,
It’s all behind us,
It’s finished now,
It’s all behind us,

Two days our own,
No body else here,
Saturday comes,
Monday morning death day.

Hey don’t worry baby,
We’ll leave together,
We’ll fly away,
It’s all behind us,

Two days our own,
No body else here,
Saturday comes,
Monday morning death day.

Happy weekend, no more tears,
Happy weekend, no more tears.

No more tears
Monday morning death day.

[Monkey:Dust]

Happy weekend, no more tears
Happy weekend, no more tears

Not an incredibly great start but not a bad one either.

Hey don’t worry baby,
It’s all behind us,
It’s finished now,
It’s all behind us,

After your intro I think you should have put a bit more here. It just feels a bit short. I for one always expect the first verse to tell me what's going on in the song and this just kind of leaves you there thinking "What the?".

Two days our own,
No body else here,
Saturday comes,
Monday morning death day.

Not a great stanza again. There isn't really anything bad with it but it doesn't make you want to continue reading.

Hey don’t worry baby,
We’ll leave together,
We’ll fly away,
It’s all behind us,

Only just starting to figure things out. I've got two people and they're leaving. Maybe add a bit more to some of these stanza's?

Two days our own,
No body else here,
Saturday comes,
Monday morning death day.

Happy weekend, no more tears,
Happy weekend, no more tears.

No more tears
Monday morning death day.

A bit repetitive.

Overall, it's a bit repetitive and doesn't tell the reader much. Add more to the stanza's and put more meaning into the song. 4/10.