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[suba_357]

Tie you up hold you close,
Keep you for days at most,
Dont you know why your here,
Because of what you did to your peer,
Why dont you think before you kill,
That your only life is in for a thrill,
You wont even feel a thing,
Just a big burst of all its pain,
Get you ready for your day,
Just to send you far away,
Strap you down nice and tight,
So you wont move tonight,
Put the sponge on your head,
Just to know your almost dead,
Put the mask upon your face,
So you cant see this ****ing place,
Place my hand upon the switch,
Getting ready to see you twitch,
Any last words before you leave,
Off to a place to which you lead,
Pull it down let it flow,
Now you going to feel this blow,
As you ly there with no air,
You've just experienced the electric chair.

[sexycakes]

OOO I love the subject, very fresh. but as far as the rythm, some of the rhymes were very forced, and im not a big fan of two liners. but with a little more work, it could come out pretty decent, all in all 6.5-7/10

[lord of darkness]

well not bad but it sounds to me like a poem or an hip-hop song, I don't know if it was your intent anyway this is good but like sexycakes said, rhymes looks forced and all the same rhyme scheme becomes boring after a while, well acording to me. But still thanks to the subject I think this is great In fact I loved it:D I'd say 8/10
good points: the subject
bad points: the rhymes which looks forced