Solitary

[Hadji]

Solitary

in a room with no sound
stands a man screaming loud
he longs for his past long gone
in a room with no mirrors
stands a man filled with fear
he longs to see his reflection

and he doesn't understand
so it's there he'll have to stand
a solitary figure in the room

in a room with no light
stands a man in the night
he longs for his sight to return
in a room with no walls
stands a man who has to crawl
if he wants to move around

and he doesn't understand
so it's there he'll have to stand
a solitary figure in the room

in the room we live in
the man remains to stand
he's afraid to move an inch
in the room we call home
the man he stands alone
he's afraid to make a friend

and he doesn't understand
so it's there he'll have to stand
a solitary figure in the room
a solitary figure in the room

[morrissey]

I know this has been mentioned before, but your writing reminds me very much of Poe. That is definitely a compliment, no doubt.

I think what is very interesting about your work is that it isn't overly complicated at all. But this makes it accessible, and more people can thus relate to it. I can't remember any specific pieces by you except for that clock one... which was good. But with 7,000 posts, I am sure you have written many songs, I will go check it out.

Anyways, I am rambling here. My point is that I like your writing, you write effective lyrics and I have no complaints. They are entertaining to read :).

[Hadji]

I know this has been mentioned before, but your writing reminds me very much of Poe. That is definitely a compliment, no doubt.

I think what is very interesting about your work is that it isn't overly complicated at all. But this makes it accessible, and more people can thus relate to it. I can't remember any specific pieces by you except for that clock one... which was good. But with 7,000 posts, I am sure you have written many songs, I will go check it out.

Anyways, I am rambling here. My point is that I like your writing, you write effective lyrics and I have no complaints. They are entertaining to read :).
Thanks for the compliments. I'm very flattered. I'll put together a zip of songs I've written and upload them here. I stopped posting lyrics for a while because people always tore them apart and I got discoureged.

[Burningwater]

Yes, very entertaining indeed. The subject here does not really appear to me, but I'm sure I can make up my own meaning to it. Everything is repetative, but with style, I very much enjoy it. Keep up the good work, I don't have any complaints either.
9.5/10(cause I didnt understand it)

[morrissey]

Thanks for the compliments. I'm very flattered. I'll put together a zip of songs I've written and upload them here. I stopped posting lyrics for a while because people always tore them apart and I got discoureged.

People tore your songs up? Either you've improve greatly, or people are idiots.

/people are idiots

[IOWNU200]

Go you, I have nothing to really say bad about your piece, it was extremely well written and i love it. It's just got this certain....rythm to it that makes everything you say sound genious and brilliant. Keep Rocking

[Hadji]

Go you, I have nothing to really say bad about your piece, it was extremely well written and i love it. It's just got this certain....rythm to it that makes everything you say sound genious and brilliant. Keep Rocking
Thanks man. I really mean that too. Thank you to everyone who has said good things about my writing. I can't really describe how good it makes me feel to know people enjoy what I write.

[morrissey]

but if it has a virus I kill you.. just kidding... no, I actually will kill you :evil:

[morrissey]

Based on your username, and your pic you seem like a big Green Day fan. I could definitely see them doing these kinds of songs on their slower ones (like Time of Your Life, Macy's Day Parade etc.) :thumb:

EDIT: I just read One Night...and living in a university residence... I can definitely relate..

EDIT 2: poor old helda didn't
get the life she wanted but she
got the life
that she deserved
Brilliant.

EDIT 3:
yesterday i threw away
my hopes and bought myself a
new set of emotions i hope
they work better this time
Excellent.

[IOWNU200]

I just read alot of your other songs too, I like "There Goes my Head" a whole lot. Are you preforming these at all?

[Hadji]

I just read alot of your other songs too, I like "There Goes my Head" a whole lot. Are you preforming these at all?
Not yet. I'm hoping to get a punk band together to preform some of my punk songs. I'd also like to find a good pianist to play my acoustic stuff with.

[morrissey]

I just read alot of your other songs too, I like "There Goes my Head" a whole lot. Are you preforming these at all?

Haha I was just going to say that he should post "There Goes My Head", I could see it getting really positive critiques...

[Hadji]

Haha I was just going to say that he should post "There Goes My Head", I could see it getting really positive critiques...
I'm gonna critique some more songs before I post again. I don't want to be breaking the rules.

[morrissey]

I'm gonna critique some more songs before I post again. I don't want to be breaking the rules.

Yeah that's true.. but tomorrow or something :)

[IOWNU200]

Not yet. I'm hoping to get a punk band together to preform some of my punk songs. I'd also like to find a good pianist to play my acoustic stuff with.

Excellent, if you get any recordings, i'd love to hear them

[Hadji]

www.soundclick.com/benverow

Some of the singing is from a while ago. 'So Long' has about the best singing I've gotten out of a recording.

[IOWNU200]

I'm enjoying these :)

[IOWNU200]

I'm enjoying these :)

[russdvdsn]

hey, iam not to good at critiquing,, hell i dont even know if i spelled it right,, but theres not much to say about this piece except good job,, and i went to ur sight and listened to some of ur music,, it sounds really good,, keep up the good work!