My Chorus Rest of song is under construction (crit)

[metallicaisthebestbandever6]

Life of Mine



This life of mine isnt all that
well
Instead it feels like a burning
Hell
I cant be what i wanna
Be
With your ignorant self pushing
me

[Kickflip_Burrito]

Don't single out certain words in a seperate sentence.

[morrissey]

Well... I don't like being mean. And I have absolutely nothing positive to say. Nothing. I can't even compliment the title... or your username... soooo...

Bye :wave:

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

i thought you displayed emotion that many of us would just keep bottled up inside.

its good to see someone letting it out for a change, rather than being depressed.

9/10

[morrissey]

i thought you displayed emotion that many of us would just keep bottled up inside.

its good to see someone letting it out for a change, rather than being depressed.

9/10

Wow, that's exactly what I would have said, if I didn't keep my feelings bottled up inside. Maybe I should read more brilliant songs like this, and learn to release my emotions in a positive way? Thank you ever so much APS, for showing me the light. And thank you metallicaboy, for creating this song that allowed me to see the light.

/I AM SAVED

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

...

Halleluiah!

[morrissey]

LORD JESUS AMEN

/you know I couldn't resist posting in here

[Hammer_of_the_Gods]

Great chorus. Just don't have single words.

Waiting for final product.....

[morrissey]

Great chorus. Just don't have single words.

Waiting for final product.....

Good luck with that. :wave:

[sexycakes]

is this a bad sitcom theme song or something? i dont get it.