Love Between Two

[SethMcBride]

Love Between Two
there are no choruses just verses and then instrumental stuff, so please crit thanks.

Verse 1
Late at night we meet
Only for some time
Out on the dark street
Your body's close to mine

Rain drops hit our heads
For you I stay tonight
No words are ever said
With you I know its right

Verse 2
Waiting for the sun rise
We hold eachother tight
Staring into your eyes and
The moon is the only light

We are soaking wet
Our hearts beat together
I feel like I'm all set
I could walk these streets forever

Verse 3
The stars glow bright
And your touch is so soft
The darkness of the night
And the world is turned off

It feels like a dream
But I know its so real
Things aren't what they seem
But this I can feel

[PTFROCKS]

nice simple lyric...i can't seem to get it to flow in some spots but that might just be me.
are you going to put a chorus in? i think it would help.
keep it up.

plz crit mine...WE RULE THE NIGHT

[SethMcBride]

I duno about the chorus cause my band recorded it without choruses and it sounds good, so I don't know....maybe we might work one in later. thanks for the crit

[PTFROCKS]

if it works without a chorus...leave it alone. i have one that has no chorus, myself...and it rocks

[SethMcBride]

yeah so you know what I mean..

[PTFROCKS]

i do indeed...rock on, my friend

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=269150

[morrissey]

This is a very good song. It is simple, but it is nice and... romantic I guess. I really liked reading it. I wouldn't suggest changing anything, it works fine as a nice simple song. Just make sure that you include a nice melody.. I could see this as a very catchy mid-tempo acoustic song or light rock, or something. Excellent work.

[SethMcBride]

hey thanks...we recorded this song if you want to hear it and yeah we used a light rock sound for it. thanks for the crit! :)

[morrissey]

I would love to hear it.

[SethMcBride]

okay but I think I have to get it from my friend's computer so I'll let you know when I get it