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ClayTheJ
11-24-2004, 09:33 PM
Well yesterday, me and my band made up a song that we didn't have lyrics for, while my drummer was playing his finger started bleeding and we called the song bloody, then immmeadiately after we finished practicing, someone IMed him named Mary so I decided to write the song about it

If you've ever heard the song 'Prostethic Head' by Green Day, the vocal scheme is set up that way


Mary, the goddess of death
Such a wh*re, to the lord, will kill you in your bed
Just say her name, and she'll show up quick
She'll cut your head off, and chop off your d*ck
Theres no way, she spares a soul
She'll take a stick, like a d*ck, and put it in your hole

In the bathroom, Bloody Mary
Lights go out, its kinda scary
Then comes somethin' really rude
In she comes, in the nude
In the bathroom, Bloody Mary
Lights go out, its kinda scary
Then she kills you, leaves you dead
Yea shes nude, thats what I said

Mary, she'll put you to rest
If life's a bore, call the wh*re, she'll make your life the best
She'll put the gun to your head
She'll pull the trigger, with her finger, she'll make you dead
Just let her do, what she wants to do
She'll fix your life, kill your wife, *she'll put the knife through

(Guitar and Drum Solos)

In the bathroom, Bloody Mary
Lights go out, its kinda scary
Then comes somethin' really rude
In she comes, in the nude
In the bathroom, Bloody Mary
Lights go out, its kinda scary
Then she kills you, leaves you dead
Yea shes nude, thats what I said



Crit me, give me ideas, anythings appreciated, I know my lyrics suck lol


*Thanks to A Perfect Sonnet for this

morrissey
11-24-2004, 09:40 PM
Glad you and your friends got a good laugh out of it.

Other than that, it sucks. :amaze:

...but you rhyme alot, which could be good, if you really like rhymes. That's all I've got.

ClayTheJ
11-24-2004, 09:42 PM
Thank ya...lol

morrissey
11-24-2004, 09:43 PM
*bows*...

:wave:

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-24-2004, 09:54 PM
Bloody Mary was a English Queen who persecuted Protestants... I dont see the relation

morrissey
11-24-2004, 09:55 PM
EDIT: oops I am an idiot. But APS is still an asshat ;)

ClayTheJ
11-24-2004, 09:55 PM
The urban legend movie lol

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-24-2004, 09:56 PM
w/e she was in the Tudor family right?

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-24-2004, 09:59 PM
moz admits defeat

APS---------Moz--
--1------------0---

morrissey
11-24-2004, 10:01 PM
Moz will be back in 15, when she will reclaim her title ;)

jameschez
11-25-2004, 03:58 AM
i dont konw why people even bother to post their work on this site.
If it doesen't have big fancy words your goining to get a crap rating.

(worried what he said my cause public outrage!)

I liked the song, It cant be taken seriously though! Just good for a laugh.

PTFROCKS
11-25-2004, 04:28 AM
everyone needs a good fun song to do. and i believe you have one here.
(make your dad moo?)
keep it up. it has something.....not sure what....but something.
;D

morrissey
11-25-2004, 10:40 AM
i dont konw why people even bother to post their work on this site.
If it doesen't have big fancy words your goining to get a crap rating.

(worried what he said my cause public outrage!)

I liked the song, It cant be taken seriously though! Just good for a laugh.

That's absolutely untrue. If its a crappy song, you get a bad rating. If its good, then you receive a good rating. Big words have nothing to do with it.

EVIDENCE: http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?p=5605092&posted=1#post5605092

now be quiet.

ClayTheJ
11-25-2004, 08:45 PM
You tell 'em

And I couldn't think of a good line for that 'make ur dad moo' sh*t lol, if you got any suggestions for that part help me out

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-25-2004, 08:50 PM
instead of make your dad moo, say "she'll put the knife through"

that would make it so much better, even though its still not good

ClayTheJ
11-25-2004, 08:53 PM
Good idea, and I know it sucks lol thanks ill fix it now

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-25-2004, 08:54 PM
we'll if you dont have something nice to say, at least fix an awkward line :)

Hadji
11-25-2004, 09:27 PM
i dont konw why people even bother to post their work on this site.
If it doesen't have big fancy words your goining to get a crap rating.

(worried what he said my cause public outrage!)

I liked the song, It cant be taken seriously though! Just good for a laugh.
My song didn't have 'big fancy words' in it and it got an 8/10.

A_Perfect_Sonnet
11-25-2004, 09:29 PM
none of mine do, anymore

i receive over 8s

you just gotta know how to write :|

morrissey
11-25-2004, 09:35 PM
My song didn't have 'big fancy words' in it and it got an 8/10.

Exactly. They just didn't know what they were talking about, because they clicked on the link to one crappy song and made an assumption about all other songs.