Death(the only form of love)

[AshesOfHate]

Death(the only form of love)

I see you looking for me
but im not here
why should I care for you
when did you care for me
all i wanted was you......

I wanted you when you were here
but you did not try
you just ran away
ran away from the pain

I bled tears of ash for you,
but you didnt care
know you wish i could come back
but im forever gone

You dont know how i feel right now
I wish i could have you but, i know i cant,
there is no life with you
nor is there death


why does no one ever care
when i'm here
you only care when i'm gone.....

I hate you,for all your stupid ****
I hate you,for all ****ing lies
I need you,I want you
I....love.........you

Konw im gone and have left this place
and now you say it back.
death is love,Death is love
death is the only form of love

[Burningwater]

I don't like lost love songs. It's been done over and over again, like a hooker. That's what it reminds me of, a hooker. "Death is the only form of love" and "bled tears of ashes" sounds to me like you thought they sounded cool and stuck them in there, they are pretty arbitrary. I would suggest using metaphor that creates a near perfect image in your mind of what you're trying to convey.
I'll give it a 4/10
Dammit I hate hooker songs...
Good luck with your next piece.