Lyrics (needs name)

[IOWNU200]

alright i just wrote this today, i tried some experimental stuff. Tell me what you think.

Save yourself

Verse 1

You can't escape from the walls you built to conceal you're desire
you keep running from truths, but I know you're legs tire
You are trapped in a world of fake friends and real consequences
(speeds up tremendously) And I know that you can be much more than a pointless symbol of a somewhat creative conception planted in your mind

Chorus

I know you can't go on neglecting your fears
and you know **** well that you can't hide it my dear
Buckle up the time is near, quickly go your soul endears
Save yourself, save the day, set the mind free, your heart will convey

Verse 2

You keep telling yourself that this is what you want to be
but deep in your heart you know that this isn't what you see (in your dreams)
No need to hold back for me
(speeds up again)
Open up your mind and let me see what you've been hiding from. For over 3 years you've neglected, for over 3 years you've rejected, all your ideas and all your plans. Open up your heart and let me inside of you're broken home and unfufilled broken dreams tonight.

Chorus

I know you can't go on neglecting your fears
and you know **** well that you can't hide it my dear
Buckle up the time is near, quickly go your soul endears
Save yourself, save the day, set the mind free, your heart will convey

[IOWNU200]

anyone?

[i am the robots]

its kinda absract. but its pretty good.

7/10

[IOWNU200]

bump

[IOWNU200]

come on people, i'll crit yours if you crit mine

[burton.and.gas]

its nice, every time you could hit a cliché or an over simplistic lyric/ beat pattern you manage to avoid it and i would it remind very much of linkin park, but it has much more creative potential.

[IOWNU200]

I've got practically 50 views and 2 replies....please somebody?

[espf-250htd06]

i like the verses no complants cept the flow could be better i think they should be split up into more verses and worded a little diffrent idk there good though the chorus needs is decent but i would start new with it if i was you it didnt do justice to the verses and seems outa place exspeically the last line

8/10 well there it is check out my song past desires and leave me a crit is kinda like this one

[CrashingDown213]

Alright, the first verse was pretty good but in the second line make it ''your legs will tire, just flows better (atleast the way i sing it)
''Creative conception planted in your mind."
^^Awesome..bottom line
The chorus itself was pretty good and I liked the last line a lot, although the chorus seemed out of place with the verses in someway or another.
The other verse, was again very impressive and once again had another line that stood out amongst the rest.
This would have to be it imo:
"For over 3 years you've neglected, for over 3 years you've rejected"
Although in the last line I'd consider taking out broken before dreams because unfulfilled seems to fit a description well enough and that also helps the flow.
Overall, pretty good work man.