Lethal Dose -- Growing season of Autumn

[LivingDeadBoy]

Quickie
Emo/Indie Rock
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A Growing Season Of Autumn
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Failing at understanding, why echoes,
follow me, behind my steps repeats...
The thoughts to strip me naked,
and scream my words out..

escape reality, its all that matters to me,
the growing season of autumn is back,
when everything is purely dead,
and the soul is up high

CHORUS
feeling broken is only a stage,
a step over a canyon,
its earthly moon, my gaze fixates,
and pupils dillated are to fade

breathing on my neck, the past comes back,
the childhood memories, in black and white,
encrusted rings and bracelets on my neck,
let me live.. let me be..

chorus
feeling broken is only a stage,
a step over a canyon,
its earthly moon, my gaze fixates,
and pupils dillated are to fade

fall down, fall out,
down and up,
ride down and up,
its early so late...

the growing season of autumn
the deathly gaze fixates
the growing season of autumn
the ghostly world disappears

the growing season of autumn
the deathly gaze fixates
the growing season of autumn
the ghostly world disappears

[Deathapalooza04]

Failing at understanding, why echoes,
follow me, behind my steps repeats...<nice imagery, but "steps repeats". NO.
The thoughts to strip me naked,<I would lose the "to".
and scream my words out..

escape reality, its all that matters to me,
the growing season of autumn is back,<first it's "growing"
when everything is purely dead,<now it's "dead"?
and the soul is up high<doesn't make alot of sense to me.

CHORUS
feeling broken is only a stage,
a step over a canyon,
its earthly moon, my gaze fixates,
and pupils dillated are to fade<if you were trying to rhyme, you failed.

breathing on my neck, the past comes back,
the childhood memories, in black and white,<Cliche'
encrusted rings and bracelets on my neck,<encrusted with what?
let me live.. let me be..

chorus
feeling broken is only a stage,
a step over a canyon,
its earthly moon, my gaze fixates,
and pupils dillated are to fade

fall down, fall out,
down and up,
ride down and up,<down and up twice in a row, does not flow. You know?
its early so late...

the growing season of autumn
the deathly gaze fixates
the growing season of autumn
the ghostly world disappears

the growing season of autumn
the deathly gaze fixates
the growing season of autumn
the ghostly world disappears<I like this part the best, it has an ok flow to it. I would try ditching a couple of "the".

Maybe:
the growing season of autumn
deathly gazes fixate
the growing season of autumn
ghostly worlds disappear

The song some moments and I'm sure I'm missing some of the metaphors because I don't have the time to absorb it fully, but most people won't catch the metaphors either, so keep that in mind.

Ok, that's all for now.

[LivingDeadBoy]

Thanks man! Yep, i understand what you mean. Going to change the mistakes.
Thanks again!
Neone else?