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10-28-2004, 01:00 PM
when u cant see anyone,
and all that you see is sand,
its like the roof of your house,
has been blown into the sea,
white roses growing on the infertile dust.

your in a desert,
make the most of the silence,
enjoy and embrace the sandstorm,
don't let the discipline,
tell you the pain helps,
tell the pain it fuels your fun!

10-28-2004, 01:27 PM
its not meant to be an emo song my m8 just called it that cos my gf just dumped me. lol i dont mind though but its not menat to be an emo mickey-take or emo song at all.

10-28-2004, 01:36 PM
You've got a nice start.. just expand on it..
maybe change the wording of a couple lines too...
i.e.. .."make the most of the silence" maybe take out the "THE" before silence.
"enjoy and embrace the sandstorm" maybe change to, "sandstorms for you to enjoy and embrace" MAYBE... I dunno...you're piece, obviously your call..
Keep this going, it's not bad